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Review:quixotic says:
Hi! I'm here with a review! (Finally!)

I'm really not one to deviate from cannon, but that was one beautifully written piece.

Remus is my favourite Marauder, perhaps because he's the one I can most relate to. The quiet thinker whose thoughts are often overlooked by others. You've revealed an innocent side to him, the fact that he thinks everything will fall into place, his thoughts on love. You've also shown how insecure he is around James. James was a star in whose shadow stood Remus. Tears threatened to come when I reached Lily and Remus' last conversation. The poor bloke. On a happier note, I love the way you've made Remus into such a multi faceted, complex character and all in a one-shot. Great job :)

Lily seems more carefree, less cautious than Remus. Sirius calls her a docile "bookish" type at the beginning of the story but to me she's coming across as anything but that, in my opinion. She's a little bit secretive both on her relationship with Remus and the one with James. She doesn't seem afraid to jump into things, either. Yet you've given her a conscience that even though she doesn't tell Remus about James at first, she can't bear to lead him on. She doesn't have a lot of self worth either, which I found was slightly surprising. The bubbly, bright girl who thinks she's replaceable? Interesting.

Overall, I loved reading this story, although it did cause my heart to break a little. I wonder if Remus would still be as fatherly and kind to Harry had he really had feelings for Lily. Who knows? Maybe he did. Another reason why I feel JK should have written a series about the Marauders. Anyway, congratulations again and continue to write you wonderful stories!

Author's Response: Hello there!

He's may favourite too, and I think it's due to the same reason too. I hated making him so innocent because it made him even more pitiful but it seemed to have overworked. With being a werewolf I think it's almost natural to feel that about James and to almost cry because he finally got something good and then it was gone.

With that I was making a small joke with how people usually refer to her as that but she could have been much more for we all we know. I'm glad that you picked up on all the different aspects of her because it means I actually managed to work them in.

Hmm, that's really interesting to ponder. Given how similar they were I think it is likely there may have been some affection but I guess we'll never know.

Thanks for this fabulous review! ♡

-Kiana


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