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Review:toomanycurls says:
Hi!! Doing our review swap. ^_^

aw man - I totally thought this was set during DH. It might be good to add that to the first chapter - even in a "man, the war is over, why are the Malfoys still holding people captive". Or something.

I'm not really a grammar/punctuation person but there are quite a few places where I is not capitalized and dialogue ends without punctuation. It's not a huge roadblock for me as a reader but it would polish the chapter up a bit.

The Holy Grail. Iiiinteresting. Are the death eaters trying to bring back Voldy-shorts? It'd be interesting to hear how/why Miss Blanc has knowledge of the Holy Grail and why a predominately Christian bit of mythology made it into wizard-land.

I really like the spunk that Imogen shows in this chapter (and in the previous one too). You write a good creepy Yaxley (which seems to have been intentional).

Oh man, is that Voldemort torturing her at the end? By the way, you write pretty good torture. It's descriptive enough for me to see what's going but not so detailed I want to stop reading.

I really like the bit of resilience she shows at the end of the chapter. Seems like she's ready to take on more torture and pain to defend her family's secret.

Author's Response: Hi!

Ahh, I really should have made that point slightly clearer in the first chapter but it all becomes clear in the next! I hope .

Grammer and punctuation do tend to sometimes be one of my worst enemies *sigh* calls for a beta reader in the future I guess! I'm really glad that you liked it though, and yes I'll let you into a secret..the shadowy figure torturing her at the end is a small fragment of Voldemort's memory, it's all his worst parts ( which is basically all of him) combined together to create this rather sinister being that is ironically, under tax let's control.

I'm really pleased that you enjoyed the way I wrote the torture; I always thought I went a little easy on Imogen in that scene hahaa but she's a trooper you see :)

Thank you so much for reviewing!

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