Hi there! I'm here with your requested review!
Ok, so you have a really amazing way of hooking the reader in. Often I like to write down comments and review as I read, but I can't do that very well with this story - it's so compelling that I'd rather just keep reading than scroll down and write about my thoughts!
With each update, I feel like I can connect with Sadie just a little more. I really felt for her in the beginning when she was looking forward to having friends. (Actually, it reminded me of Luna's comment about the DA, that "it was like having friends" - you can't help but want to hug her! That's how I felt about Sadie after that part when she's marvelling at what it would be like to have friends.)
The way you write Sadie's emotions is so real. The part where she leaves breakfast to sit by herself - I wouldn't have expected anything else, because as nice as the Weasleys are, they can definitely be overwhelming - but the way you described her thoughts, just, wow. Her focus on how wonderful it is to have a meal (she's lucky she's staying with the Weasleys :p ) and the way she thinks about the fuzzy memories of her family slipping away as she walks up the hill... That girl has been through so much. And I don't even know what it all was yet, but I'm starting to get a clearer picture. But I like that, it seems to fit really well. It's like because Sadie is suppressing the memories, we don't find out about what they are. So the way you've withheld much of the information about it is a great way to tell her story, if I'm making sense haha.
As for the canon characters, they were excellent. Fred and George finishing each other's sentences - that never gets old! Hermione and Ginny didn't even speak in this chapter and they were still perfect! I know this sounds weird, but the way they were sleeping (Hermione curled up, Ginny sprawled out) seems perfect for each of them haha.
And Bill! He is the most wonderful older brother. I really enjoyed his conversation with Sadie, and I'm glad it was he that talked to her. It definitely fits - Bill as the oldest probably looks out for everyone a little more than his siblings do. And the fact that he's a curse breaker too, I feel like that helped him relate to her at least a little. When Sadie finally talks to Harry I think they'll be able to connect really well too, since Harry also has those memories he'd rather not have, like when the Dementors attacked him in PoA and he heard his parents screaming before they died. I mean, that's not a very happy topic to bond over, but it'll be good to have someone who can relate to her a little on the sad stuff as well as just make her feel better.
Now, for a little bit of CC- I found a typo here: fisted her hands into back of the jacket - that should say "into the back".
Also, I wonder about the section where all the magic was scaring Sadie. When I first read it, I thought it was what she experienced when she took the Portkey, since the last thing you mentioned before then was about how nervous she was. It took me a bit to realise that the panic was actually just about the crowd (and even then, I thought it was about the post-Quidditch Death Eater activity, until she started talking with Bill.) That's just the way I read it, so I think it might benefit from a little clearing up as to when all this happened. (a sentence at the end of the previous section would do, just mentioning that they got there with no issues, or something.) But - you are the author, and you can do as you like, of course! I get that you're trying to make it vague because Sadie's so mixed up, so I understand why it wouldn't be super clear. I just got a bit confused at first, that's all.
Well, that aside - this was truly a wonderful chapter! And I think this may be the longest review I've ever written :p Good luck with all the real life stuff and I'm really looking forward to your next chapter, whenever that may be - but take your time ;) Amazing work!
Author's Response: I'm sorry it has taken me so long to respond to this AMAZING review! Seriously, one of the best I've ever received! You are so kind to me!
I totally understand what you mean about the annoyance of having to scroll down and write thoughts, then come back up. But, I'm squealing like a little girl that my story has hooked you in that much. :D Thanks! Makes me so excited!
That part you mention about Luna and her having friends is one of the most poignant moments of the whole series to me, and so I'm sure I was probably channeling that just a little as I wrote this, but it's so true. Having friends is one of the best things in life, and when you don't get that opportunity, it's sad.
As for Sadie, I am SO happy you feel like you are connecting with her. That's what I wanted, when I started posting this story, so you are making my wishes come true.
And now you are just making me blush from your compliments. I do try hard to push Sadie's emotions through, and make her feel real and not contrived or cliche. And you are right that part of how I'm revealing information has to do with Sadie's personality. I was very worried when I started this that people would hate me for the slow reveals, but it's just how I felt it needed to go. Sadie is a very closed off person at this point, and telling too much would ruin that.
But you are right in that she's been through a lot, and eventually you'll find out about a lot of it.
Yup blushing again. Thank you for the compliments on the canon characters! I've had so much fun writing them all. And how could I have a fic without my twins finishing each other's sentences? hehehehe
I think I kind of relate to Bill a little. I'm the oldest kid in my family, and yeah, old siblings do feel a bit more responsibility to take care of the rest sometimes I think. I'm really glad you liked the Bill part. I was worried it would be awkward or weird, but I also wanted Sadie to start talking to someone! And yes, I do plan for Harry and Sadie to start talking as well. They have a lot of catching up to do.
Seriously, that type is still there? I thought I fixed that. Bad me!
Sorry for the confusion with the switching sections. :( Didn't mean to cause that. I actually did try it with a bit more clarification at first, but it just didn't work with the mood I was trying to set, so I took a risk. And lost you in the process! Again, so sorry!
Thanks for the best review ever! And for your patience as I got to replying to it. I've decided I will come back to writing earlier than planned, doing this fic as my NaNo project, so start looking for updates again soon.