|Review:||nott theodore says:|
I was so pleased to see you'd updated this story, and that we got to see James with Harry! I've been really intrigued about how you'd write him since who his father is has such a big impact on James's life, and I was really interested to see your characterisation of him. The relationship felt a little ambiguous, and I couldn't really describe it yet, but I think Harry was trying to protect James by not giving him all the information that Corrigan was giving away. He was trying to do his job, too, but I feel like he wants to protect James (and the other students) from being exposed to the horrors he faces as part of his job.
Backtracking a bit, but I really liked the way that you opened this chapter, especially with the reactions of the girls and boys to what happened with the beds setting on fire. I can definitely see the boys (including Albus) trying to be some sort of knight in shining armour figure and looking after the girls. I liked the fact that while most people hadn't thought past the emotions the fire caused, James is already convinced that it's connected with the body. I think there's a detective somewhere in this boy!
I loved Teddy's appearance! He seemed so fun and natural and although it's a small thing, I liked the fact he's still training to be a Healer, because so many stories just launch all the next generation into glittering careers as soon as they leave Hogwarts, which isn't very realistic! I liked the detail about the Magical Mortuary as well.
I have one tiny Brit-pick (if you don't mind) - we call a class schedule a timetable.
Harry's reaction when James mentioned spells at random was brilliant! I liked the fact that James doesn't actually know why his dad is reacting in that way, and nor do Albus and Lily, but the reader knows exactly what causes the reaction. Lily's guess isn't actually far off though, since he probably could have killed Draco if Snape hadn't been able to heal him.
This could be me imagining things, but am I sensing some sort of triangle between Albus, James and Erin? Because if I am then I have a feeling that it won't end well...
I can't wait to see what happens next! I think that the body of Bartleby Cuffe must have something to do with Erin or Erin's family, but I'm not sure - then again, it could all be a massive red herring that you're laying in front of us! Either way, I'll look forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: *hides* I should be lashed for waiting so long to answer this review. I'm really, really sorry! It's no comment on your lovely review, believe me! ♥ I'm trying to update this story again tomorrow, too!
I loved writing James/Harry interaction, and while initially I didn't intend to bring Harry back for much beyond this chapter, now I might have to find a way. I just love writing Harry. :) He was definitely being protective of his son, which I think is natural, knowing as we do the sort of childhood Harry himself had.
Dear Albus, wanting to protect Erin. ♥ Reading over this review (and others) really has made me see that I miss this story. I haven't touched it in a while, for several reasons... but I might try and finish chapter 5 this week, so I can post chapter 4!
And now I want to develop Teddy more, too -- I am for some reason incredible intrigued with the Magical Mortuary. I smell a short story! And I'm SO GLAD you caught that bit about random spells. ♥ It's a subtle nod to canon I knew everyone wouldn't catch, but I'm glad someone did!
*wiggly eyebrows at your insinuation of triangles*
Now I'm just too excited about this story. I've stepped back from it enough to really miss it now! :D Hopefully I'll get to work on it very soon, though not today (so busy, oh my goodness), but I hope you'll return when I do post again! Thanks for reviewing!