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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey, here for review tag.

This was a nice little one-shot giving an insight into the friendship between Sirius and Remus. I liked how Sirius wanted Remus to embrace his love. You also got Remus' character well.

The dialogue and writing style was interesting and natural. The entire interaction felt believable and I can actually see this happening in canon so good job. This was short but definitely an enjoyable read, and a fresh perspective on an existing canon event, so I liked it.

The only CC I'd give is that there were a few typos here and there, for example, wand misspelled as want. You might want to give this a quick re-read and fix them. Besides that, the narrative was smooth and the premise interesting. Your characterisations of Remus and Sirius were also spot on. I wish we had more insight into their thoughts apart from the dialogue too, but that's just my personal preference.

All in all, good work.
8/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi AD!

Thanks so much for a great review! I'm glad you liked my micro-fic and that Remus and Sirius worked well. They're really fun for me to write.

I'll go through and catch those typos - I appreciate you pointing them out. ^_^ I did leave this rather sparse on the descriptions and insights. I'm not sure I'll add more to this fic just because I've combed over Sirius and Remus as they relate to the Remus/Tonks relationship so much that I'd be stealing from my other stories to add to this one.

Thank you again for such a nice review!



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