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Review:nott theodore says:
*Sneaks in guiltily because it's been so long since she left the last review*

I've missed this story so much, I really have. Hopefully it won't take me too long to get caught up (I know I keep saying that but I really do mean it. I'm back at uni which means I'll have plenty of time to procrastinate :P). I loved this chapter so much!

The way that you structured this chapter made it really effective, as switching between Belle and Sirius and Lily and James helped to build up to the end of the chapter and give us more of an overall perspective about what's happening. I could imagine them both happening at the same time and I think the way you wrote it was just right. The length is never a killer with your lovely writing, dear! You always manage to keep me interested and engaged!

The first part of this chapter just gave me so many feels with all the Lily and James fluffiness. None of it was overdone and I loved the way that Lily was reflecting on her relationship with James and wondering how it had become so serious, but at the same time it doesn't scare her. It's such a difference to the way she felt at the start of the story and it's great to see them growing closer, even if they're not saying the 'l' word yet. And I loved seeing James being a gentleman as well, trying to pay for two rooms rather than sharing.

At the same time, you communicated Lily's worry really well. You manage to add so much depth to the relationship between Petunia and Lily (to everything, actually) and it doesn't seem unrealistic, as if Petunia just hates Lily for being a 'freak'. I can see that that point - when Lily's magic couldn't bring their parents back - seems to be the real breaking point in their relationship, and I can actually understand Petunia's reasoning a bit, which is incredible!

I really liked the way that you switched from the sweet section about James and Lily to a really tense and nervous situation for Sirius and Belle. I was so pleased when Sirius said that he was going with her and I really felt for her when she was getting nervous about going in and confronting her parents. It definitely isn't an easy thing to do and she's so brave for even attempting it! I loved Sirius's anecdote about what Olivia had said to him about having opinions - it fits in so well with her character and it's great that Sirius got to experience love like that and have a few years at least when he was free and relatively happy.

James's thoughts about someone with a name like Vernon really made me laugh. It sounds like he's a good judge of character (even before he's met the person). I really like the way that you're incorporating this dinner which has only been briefly mentioned by Jo and letting it play out in front of us. Poor James, thinking that maybe this dinner won't be so bad after all!

I really don't know what to think about all the photos and everything being back in Belle's room. It's almost like her parents have set up some sort of shrine to her, and I think maybe deep down they do love her - or at least love the idea of her as a perfect daughter to fit their mould. I'm not sure whether they were trying to hurt her or remind her how much she was missing with the way they'd put all those things in her room. And the fact about her favourite dessert - it was a nice gesture, but I can't believe that they don't even know her love of chocolate! And then when Christophe turns up! I really didn't expect that to happen, and I'm not sure why they did it either. It was nice to see that Belle does have some happy memories of her childhood though, because it would be far too easy (and unbelievable) to make them all unpleasant. I liked the fact that Belle was obviously a stronger person as well, being able to make them speak English because of Sirius being there - I think his presence definitely helped.

I really don't blame Sirius for punching Christophe, because he definitely deserved to be punched and I kind of wanted to do it myself! I can't believe that her parents would swallow all of his lies over believing their daughter, but I know that there are people like that in the world.

You wrote the dinner so well! I can definitely see Vernon being so obstinate and arrogant, trying to show off in front of James and one-up him when he's talking about cars and stuff. I was quite glad that the Patronus arrived in time to stop James from getting too angry, because he was doing such a good job and trying hard to be a good boyfriend for Lily.

I know I seem to say this in almost every review, but I love the way that you write the friendship between all of these characters. You can really tell that they'd do almost anything for each other, like the way Alice has given up some of her holidays with Frank so that Belle can stay with her. I'm hoping that Sirius and Belle will make it to Lily and James in time to help them with whatever attack is coming for them, because I don't think it'll be good!

The ending with the kiss was so perfect! I didn't see that part coming either but it just seemed to fit really well and I'm happy that Sirius and Belle are finally at the point they might start a relationship!

Sian :)

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