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Review:milominderbinder says:
Hiya! Maia here from review tag :)

So, this was really really sweet. I read your story Myrtle the other day which obviously super angsty and I really liked your writing there, but it's clear you can write fluff really well too! (I think I preferred Myrtle but that's just because I have an angsty soul :P)I thought their relationship here was really cute and really well characterised. You showed really well their comfort around each other and that familiarity which I think made their relationship so believable here. I really liked that you put them both in Ravenclaw. That's almost always how I write them too, and it's really nice seeing a slightly different and much more realistic (in my opinion) characterisation of their relationship than you often see in fic.

My only mild criticism is that I noticed a couple of minor grammar mistakes. The main thing I'd point out is that in most of your speech, you're typing either like "Example." said Mrs Example, or "Example" said Mrs Example, and it should go like "Example," said Mrs Example - with a comma. When you use speech tags (the thing following something in quote marks which tells you who said it), the speech is still part of that overall sentence. And you can't start a sentence with a verb ("said") and not attach it to something. Like, you wouldn't say "danced Mrs Example." as a sentence by itself. I'm not sure how clearly I'm explaining this - if I'm being confusing you might be better off googling it! I'm not a very good teacher :P Hope I helped a little though! But yeah, that was the only consistent grammar mistake I noticed, other than a couple of formatting things like inconsistent paragraph spacing which is totally understandable because HPFF's chapter editor is really weird about spaces :P

So, other than that, I thought this was super cute and I really liked it! You had a really fresh take on Rose and Scorpius' relationship, with refreshingly original characterisations of both of them, and I thought it worked really well. Your plot was cute and super fluffy (always a good thing) and it was funny too! Well done!

~Maia

Author's Response: Maiaaa! It's taken me forever to respond. I am so sorry!

Aww, thank you :) This was the second story I wrote for fanfiction and it was lots of fun to write. I always like to see a review on this one! I'm glad you think i wrote the well. I know that there are plenty of stories about them, and that you find this entertaining and different is very nice to hear :) I happy to hear that you liked the characterisation and found this quite realistic :)

I know the dialogue tags are a bit wrong on this. I've rectified it actually. I had an edited version that I thought I'd put up, but after seeing your review I realised that I hadn't put up the version where I've fixed it, so I've taken care of that now! Thanks for telling me :) The formatting is one of my greatest nightmares, because I keep changing it in hope that it comes out alright, but I've always stuffed something up. I'll fix this too :)

Yay :) That's what I was going for! And I'm glad you liked it. Hope you had a good laugh! I really appreciate all the praise, especially about the characterisation and everything you mentioned at the end! It was really sweet of you :)

Thanks for this lovely review. And I'll drop you a line when I write something angsty next ;)


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