|Review:||teh tarik says:|
Helloo! I'm here with your review as promised! Sorry for taking so long.
First, congratulations! I saw the results for this challenge and you did amazingly well. Also, for a first step into the deep, dark territory of angst, you did wonderfully. Myrtle was a brilliant character choice for that quote, and I think you did a great job with this short but intense character study. It's just so terribly sad, how short her life was, and just how abrupt and meaningless her death was. And it's even more depressing when you realise that Myrtle is frozen for all eternity in this state of endless despair, "cursed to haunt bathrooms", as you put it so well in your fic. The reality of Myrtle haunting toilets until the end of time, strangely, feels so ridiculous that it's almost laughable, and this ties in really well with her portrayal in the books. Myrtle in the books is more a comedic, silly character than an actual tragic one, and she certainly doesn't get a lot of sympathy from most other students. But here in your story, you've taken that ridiculous bathroom-haunting aspect of hers and really broken it down and revealed the true nature of the tragedy.
I do this often...Sitting and making lists and lists of all the things I've never done...
^ I absolutely love those lines. Ugh, it's just so desolate and I can't even imagine it. I love the detail about how she tries to refrain from looking out the window, because of course, the outside world is something that will be denied to her forever. And the idea of her sitting alone in her flooded bathroom every day counting the girls who come in and listening to their laughter and making lists of things that she never did and never will be able to do...gah! Just so...heartbreaking :((
You have some lovely descriptive parts here and there; I love all those images of light in the beginning. It gives that hopeful tone to the start of the story, but of course, the mood gets progressively darker. And of course, there were those vivid references to Myrtle's ghostly appearance, the 'milkiness' of it - it's a very unique way to describe the cloudy, translucent ghosts of Hogwarts!
Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was certainly sad, but you did justice to Myrtle, who must have been quite a misunderstood character in canon, and you gave her a voice and wrote her with so much emotional depth. Lovely writing, my dear! I'm so glad I had the chance to read this! ❤ ♡
Author's Response: Teh! â¤ This has taken me the longest time and there is no excuse. I'm so sorry!
Thank you! :) It really was a challenge for me because I LOVED the quote I'd gotten. This idea refused to leave my head, and I really hadn't tried angst before. So I took up the challenge and decided to go for it. I admit, I'd never actually given Myrtle a second thought in the books. She appears to be incredibly ridiculous and her character really doesn't have too much depth. So I was wary of writing this, but I was really inspired and I really wanted to, so I went for it! I'm glad you liked it! I like that you understood the way I'd written her and that you felt that I'd captured her bottomless sorrow well. Thanks for telling me that I made the right choice for the quote :)
It is, isn't it? :( I wrote that line to convey exactly that! I'm glad you picked up on it. Also, it somehow makes it more personal, doesn't it? All these things are pretty normal things for the rest of us, but she never got to experience it.
OH WOW. Teh! YOU are like the queen of description and if YOU think that I've done a great job with the descriptive bits... dghjfhgkjf... I can't even tell you how happy that makes me! :D It made my day, really.
Woah. That's such a nice thing to say :') I'm glad you enjoyed this and felt that I delivered in terms of depth and intensity. This review has made my day! THANK YOU :) â¤