Hiya! Maia here from review tag :)
So, idk if you remember but we met in review tag the other day, when you reviewed my Regulus oneshot! So I was pretty excited to read this because yay, Regulus! Like I mentioned in my response to your review, I've not really read much that's focused on his character before. That said, I thought you did a great job here.
I really liked your characterisation of Regulus. You showed his more vulnerable side, and his reluctance, and how he's been influenced by his family and his father especially, while still giving him a toughness that would allow him to be a death eater. I really loved the part about letting Rowle do legilimency on him to check his loyalty. Because it showed that actually, Regulus, at this stage, WANTS to be in the death eaters, he doesn't have anything to hide, even if he's scared or doesn't know what he's getting himself into he's still loyal to the idea at this stage. For me that stood out really powerfully and I think it will only make his character more interesting as you continue this, and show as his loyalty begins to falter.
So, my favourite part was:
"I'm not afraid," Regulus had said. But that wasn't true, was it? Because for ten nights he had woken in a cold sweat, remembering how limp the muggle girl had gone after she'd been hit by the Killing Curse. His killing curse. He could still see the light fading from her dead eyes.
I don't quite know why because you have some really lovely writing in this whole piece, but the literary devices in that quote just really stuck out and made it powerful for me. Rhetorical questions! Varied sentence lengths! Other amazing things that make English students like myself drool! Haha, so well done there.
There were a few minor typos, but not nearly enough to ruin the story, and nothing a quick edit couldn't fix! I'm nitpicky about stuff like that :P
Overall, I thought this was a really great look at Regulus, and a strong start to what I'm sure will be an amazing story.
My only little note which has nothing to do with the actual story is that I noticed you haven't credited your banner in your summary. So you should probs do that.
Great job! I think I will keep up with this story and see where the rest of it goes, because you've really hooked my attention < 3
Author's Response: Hey there Maia!
I definitely do remember your one-shot, because it was awesome! And I'm glad you thought I did a good job here:)
I am so, so glad you liked my characterization of Regulus. Because he's certainly not a hero - the original HP books tell us that - but I wanted to find a way to make him likeable here, and I hope I've achieved that!
Thank you for the lovely review!