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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there!

First of all, sorry it's taken me so long to get around to this chapter. I'd say life has been hectic but it hasn't really. So my excuse is that I am clearly one of the most lazy human beings to walk the earth.

Anyway, I loved this chapter, particularly the fight scene. I thought it was extremely well written and I'm not quite sure how you managed to pull it off - if I attempted to write something like that, it would probably be complete rubbish.

I think my two favourite characters during and before the fight scene would have to have been Narcissa and Lucius. Narcissa because I loved how strong you made her and how strong Draco saw her as being. I also loved this stony sort of fierceness she had about her, if that makes any sense. Both her character and her relationship with Draco are exactly how I imagine, from reading the HP books.

I also really liked Lucius in this chapter. Well, I didn't actually like him as a character, but I love how you have written him as completely barmy, still believing that he is the Department of Mysteries. It's very interesting to read!

I also enjoyed the small section of Astoria's point of view, because it was nice to see a snippet of her relationship with Daphne.

And then that cliffhanger at the end! How could you?? I'm already eager for the next chapter!


Author's Response: Hi, Courtney!

No need to apologize. The laziness bug bites all of us from time to time. For instance, I'm not nearly as far along on the next chapter as I planned to be. :(

I really enjoy writing fight scenes. In this story and in CoB, they have always been my favorite parts. If I have any sort of trick to writing them, it's just trying to keep a really clear mental picture of where everyone is positioned and what they're doing as the scene develops. Then you just do your best to make sure that comes through in the words.

Eek. I'm not sure how much I want people to like Lucius, but I guess he does come to the rescue in this scene. He has mostly lost his marbles, but he still has enough martial skills to help keep his wife and son alive.

I am glad you like Narcissa. The more I write her, the more I've started to like her, too. She's a very different type of "mother figure" from Lily Potter or Molly Weasley, but I think that's part of the appeal. Her background and her values system is completely different, but she doesn't love her son any less.

I felt like Astoria got shorted a little in this chapter, but there really wasn't much else to say. It's that mysterious knock on the door that's never good news...

All I can say about the next chapter is I'm working on it. Hopefully, it's worth the wait. :)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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