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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for review tag.

This was such a sad, touching, and beautifully written piece. I loved it. Your characterisation of Mary was very interesting - though we only see her through Regulus' thoughts I could already tell the kind of person she was and she felt very believable. I could literally imagine her in my head with the way you provided the descriptions and imagery.

My heart went out to Regulus while reading this. I could feel his pain, his sorrow, his frustration, his love, and it really touched me. It was so raw and fresh in your writing that I was hooked. Once again I have to commend your descriptions which were amazing.

I enjoyed the writing style as well. It was all in Regulus' thoughts and I liked that as it gave it a more personal feel. I think you did a very good job in getting the emotions across. I also understood the backstory perfectly and the entire context and the events that had happened all through the narrative without any separate parts explaining it which is pretty noteworthy.

The only CC I'd give is that there were a few grammatical typos I noticed here and there, especially in the beginning. If those could be fixed (and that can be done with a quick re-read) this one-shot would be flawless. I really, really, loved it. I am so glad I got a chance to read it. Great job!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it :)

Before I get on with the rest of this response I just wanna say UGH TYPOS, someone else pointed them out a couple of days ago and I hate having them in my fics so I immediately went and edited it all, and the edited version has now been sat in the queue for two days so hopefully the nice shiny error free version will be up soon... but thanks for pointing them out!

I'm glad you liked Mary's characterisation. I really tried to make her an interesting character, with a lot of flaws as well as good parts, and not just some tragic heroine for Reg to moon over - making her a tangible person even in only his own recollections of her was a challenge, but I'm glad you liked it!

Gosh, I'm so glad you liked my writing style here too. Weirdly I didn't revise this fic a ton of times or write bits of it out of order like I usually do, it pretty much just flowed onto the page, so I'm really glad it seems cohesive and understandable. I didn't want to have it cutting about with flashbacks and the like because that kind of style just seemed a little too messy in this context - glad you liked all those choices!

Thanks for the lovely review :)

~Maia


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