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Review:academica says:
Hello, I'm here at last with your requested review!

I like what you did with this one-shot. I think you did a nice job of explaining why Snape was so unpleasant all the time - well, among many reasons - by describing his sleepless nights and the fear that constantly followed him. I also liked how you heightened the suspense throughout the story by vaguely describing the red-haired woman and continually adding in those cryptic words she spoke to him. I actually thought the climax would be him taking his "final rest," but it was extra creepy to actually go into the dream and face the strange woman at last.

Speaking of which, I definitely did not expect it to be Charity Burbage there at the end! I can tell you really played off of everyone figuring it would be Lily haunting him, and it seemed like even Snape himself was surprised by the big reveal.

I can't come up with any way to heighten the suspense further. I liked your slow build up and your use of the single lines toward the end, because it helped slow the scene down and force the reader to examine the horror before them. To me, this was written quite effectively.

Sorry I don't have any crit, but hopefully you don't mind :) Nice work, once again! Hope this review is helpful!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda! I am so so sorry this response is so late! Life is kicking me at the moment, so I do apologise! Thank you so much for reviewing!

I am really glad you enjoyed this, I tried my best to incorporate ideas that were Snape-ish, without losing him or the suspense in the story. Hopefully it worked!

Haha yusss, I tricked ya! It was originally going to be Lily, but when I was going over my ideas with my Beta she suggested that I open up the field for someone else, and the similarities between the two worked well and we came up with Charity! I am really happy it seems to be surprising all who have reviewed so far, which makes me relieved that the idea worked :D

Naww, lots of squee right now! I am happy you think so. I have never written anything like this so to hear that you think it was written well is such a boost, thank you!

Thank you again, i really appreciate it :D

Grace


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