Hi again! *waves*
Like, dude, seriously, the first section had me shaking. At first I was so confused, and then I was having a panic attack. I was literally saying, "Wait.. WHAT?! They can't be dead!" Your descriptions were so vivid. I think it hit me when you said, It was the Lovegood girl.
That and everything after, from the Weasleys to Seamus, and even Draco's own people was so chilling to read. There was a sick kind of thrill I felt, and everything was flawless.
I really liked reading more of Astoria in this. Her father seems loving, and I love the person he is. I always imagined him to be a Death Eater, but your way makes much more sense so I think I like that :) Astoria seems perfect for Draco.. I think so at least. She's sweet and lovable and just... ah ♥ I want to be her friend. Nuff said. But also.. Since she's so nice and Draco's a jerk I think some major feelsies is going to be coming up in the future chapters so I'll make note to bring kleenex next time.
Your descriptions for Blaise were so well done. I could see that he was a little wrong in the head, and was falling apart.
Again, I love this Post War scene you create - it truly is Post War. You really keep it close to canon and your attention to details blow me away.
I'm feeling sorry for Malfoy, I really am. I can't wait to see how you give depth to his character. You pull him off magnificently. Though he's broken and stuff, I can still sense the lingering Malfoy swagger in him. It's there, but only just.
A fabulous chapter! And now, onward!
Author's Response: Hello, again! And thanks for stopping back by!
Whew. I'm really glad that Draco's nightmare played well for you. Out of the entire chapter, that was the thing I was most worried about. I wanted to keep the descriptions very spartan and dark, but I was worried that nobody would be able to figure out what was happening.
Astoria's father loves her and Daphne a great deal, he sometimes just has very different ideas about what's best for her. He's very traditional in many ways, and he also feels a lot of resentment toward the Blacks, the Malfoys and the other old families who supported Voldemort during the war. In his mind, they tarnished what it means to be from an old, pureblood family out of simple greed and arrogance.
Zabini didn't live through the same things that Draco did, so he doesn't understand what the war was really all about. To him, it just seems like a big lost opportunity. I'm glad that his wrongheadedness came across clearly.
Draco and Astoria both have many trials to face, but there will be some happy moments along the way. I hope you won't need **too many** tissues. :)
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!