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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
This chapter is absolutely amazing, as always, and the words are flowing, and beautiful, and I enjoyed every word of it. This story truly takes you to another place, and when you described where Simon was, it made me cringe and want to stop reading, but I carried on, because it was truly gripping and very moving.

I love how you started the chapter, introducing the scene and Astrid so smoothly. I loved the repitition as well, it really seemed to grasp how fed up and bored she was.
The sentence, "Mission details, mon oeil. Not on a Friday evening at eight." was very funny, and made me chuckle an awful lot! I thought it was very typical Astrid, and I know I've said it before, but the french bits make this story so unique, and it really enriches the story.
The way you put Astrid had to battle with patriotism and comfort, especially I liked the bit about how her toes made the choice for her! :) The way it was akward, and then there was an attempt at conversation, and it really made me want to punch Alban. It was definitely worth Astrid restraining herself though, and it made me completely empathise with her when she did just have to bite her tongue. I loved the horrible note saying 'my pleasure' that was deliciously horrid, and reminded me a bit of Umbridge actually.

Simon is already such a noble and humble and awesome character - the way you describe where he works is horrifying, and especially the depth of the conditions, it must've been beyond freezing for them. I loved the metaphor of the collapsing structure, that was really clever, as it symbolises Simon as well as the house. One small thing and he could collapse.

The most totally-adorable scene EVER was so between Camille/Xavier!! Nothing like an injured man to spice things up a bit...hahah I found it amusing it wasn't like a sexy cut or anything, it was just like a horrible disfigured nose! Still, I reckon romance is going to blossom between them, just one too many shot of alcohol was so nice the way she was so tenderly looking after him, and he was asking after her, and awwwhhh! I might just explode with the awesomeness of this couple! They're so sweet and caring towards each other! I liked the emphasis on the wear and exhaustion of the war on them both, that was pure genius.

How Esther died was very delicately put - you could've gone wrong in quite a few ways, but it was very sensitively put, and of course it would be Sarah that would've seen it. The fact that they would let them work to death in those conditions was horrific enough, but poor 13 year old Sarah, that was just sick. It was so full of suspense and my heart was racing so fast when he could feel the wand in the toilet brush (of all the places, the toilet brush) and when they discovered Simon not being in his place...BRILLIANTLY written!!! I loved the way Sarah said: "take me away from here!"

Altogether, a super chapter, with even more awesome characterisation and touching moments.

Sophie :D

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