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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! I'm here for our review swap! I hope you don't mind that I've chosen this story to read; it was your most recently updated WIP, and it sounded really interesting. Also, I love post-Hogwarts fic. :)

Wow. Your story has such an intriguing premise. I'm guessing the war is over, and yet the Death Eaters are still around, plotting something awful, involving the Holy Grail of all things! I love this idea; I always love it when writers include elements of other mythologies and combine them with the Potterverse; it honestly makes things so much richer and imaginative.

You've really gone into so much detail to describe the narrator's harrowing experience of torture and imprisonment and overall cruel treatment at the hands of those Death Eater brutes. Your descriptions of her pain was so vivid and so shocking, and gah...I just can't get that image of your OC having a collar and leash around her neck. It's utterly dehumanising, and you really don't shy away from portraying the realities of Muggle-born treatment at the hands of those pureblood supremacists. Your prose is very vivid and raw, and there are so many striking details, e.g. the description of Jugson: One of his eyes didn't follow the other and always seemed to be looking at something across the room, his skin was like sandpaper, pigmented with dirt. So creepy! :O

And I love the contrasts between the grimy dungeon and the lavish setting of the interior of Malfoy Manor. That scene with all the purebloods sitting around a table was so odd and so dreamlike, which is really fitting, seeing as your OC has been drifting in and out of dreams throughout the whole five months she's been imprisoned. It's just utterly strange that she's made to sit at a table, all dirty and bloody along with those spotless pureblood types. And to be the thirteenth person as well. Love that canon reference there!

Your depiction of Malfoy was really convincing as well. It's just so Draco. He looks as though he doesn't want to be part of any of this, but is tooa fraid to speak up or leave, and instead frowns into his lap. I can imagine that he's incredibly uncomfortable and possibly more than a little guilty that his old schoolmate has been tortured and trapped for months right beneath this luxurious house that he lives in.

Anyway, this is a really intriguing start! I would love to find out what the Death Eaters' intentions are with the Holy Grail (I can't quite remember what the Grail's powers are...maybe they want to bring back Voldemort or something...?), or how they even managed to regroup after the war and elude Azkaban and all. Great start! And thank you so much for agreeing to do the review swap with me!

-teh :D

Author's Response: Oh wow! Thank you so much for going through the effort of writing such a in depth and positive review! I feel really guilty for not doing the same with yours and i think I will get to work on writing a review your story deserves!

I am very very glad that you liked all the elements of torture and the depiction of Imogen's pain. I tried very very hard to create a paradox between the life in the dungeons and the lavish lifestyle of the death eaters above. Also with regards to Draco and the element of guilt that he always has, I think that plays a very big part with the rest of the story and certainly drives his character in my opinion.

Thank you so much for taking the time to review this! :)


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