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Review:academica says:
Hello, here for our review swap :)

This was a very cute start! I kept drawing parallels between your Astoria and canon Ginny, where she just kind of admired her crush from afar and only got his attention later after she'd grown up and done a bit of self-discovery. I also liked how Astoria didn't romanticize all of Draco's bad decisions in his last few years of school. It was also nice to see her reflect on her own choices and regrets during that time.

The only thing I didn't really love about this was the flow. It seemed like you sort of ran out of steam as the chapter went on; the first section was full of interesting detail and the second section had some great dialogue in it, but the last couple sections were briefer and I found the ending a tad bit abrupt. I'd love to see you go back and flesh it out more - for instance, maybe we could see more about Daphne's reaction to Astoria's request to bring a wedding date. It also would have been nice to actually see Astoria ask Draco to the wedding, given her discussion about being too shy to talk to him as a student.

Great start! Thanks for the swap :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda :) Sorry I took a bit to get to this.

I'm glad you liked the start :) Actually, canon Ginny was on the back of my mind while writing this. But I wanted there to be quite a few differences between them because Draco/Astoria is different. I'm pleased to hear that you liked Astoria. I really wanted to establish her as her own person; make her strong-willed and independent, instead of someone who doesn't seem to have their own mind.

That's some great advice, Amanda. Actually, I think I will take it on and add in all those details when I edit this. There are some typos that I still need to work through. I'll get this done when i'm doing that :)

Thanks for the swap and the lovely review :)


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