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Review:randomwriter says:
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This is so incredibly mind-numbingly beautiful. I haven't read something in Regulus' voice before, so it was really interesting. I love the tone you used throughout this piece. It was very fitting.

I really liked the characterization of both Mary and Regulus. You made Mary so striking that I felt like a lot of people would be drawn or attracted to her. But you justified her personality. She might have been attention seeking, but she was a beautiful person who deserved it. As for Regulus or Reg, I have no words. As the story progressed, I felt myself sympathizing with him so much that I felt like I could experience his pain. It is so difficult to deal with loss and I guess I really connected with his character because I too turn to writing to deal with loss, more specifically, I too write letters.

I loved how you interspersed his words and thoughts with Mary words and thoughts. It was a wonderful addition and really added value to this.

If I were to give you some CC, it would be that there a few typos, grammatical errors and tense issues, but it's nothing that a quick read through can't fix. Some sentences need to be re-worded too. But I don't think it takes away much from the beauty of this story. Just edit it sometime, but don't worry about it much.

To conclude, I must applaud you on your selection of words when it came to description and tell you that I really liked this. The ending broke me and made me smile because it really was perfect. I loved how you referenced several serious themes and issues over here and gave them a slightly more humorous side. We don't see that too much. And that ending... I can't seem to stop going on about it :P I wish you luck in this challenge. Hope you liked the review! :)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for this lovely review! I honestly don't understand how these characters managed to come across so vividly in such a short fic, but I'm glad that they did, and I'm glad you connected to them. I'm very lucky and have never lost anyone close to me, so I'm glad you felt his process of dealing was realistic as I was writing from a purely empathetic point of view rather than experience, and I was worried that it might seem strange that he was writing a letter to her to try and deal with his grief.

Gosh, I'm usually so good at spotting spelling and grammar mistakes, so I don't know how those slipped through! The English student in me is highly embarrassed :P Thanks so much for pointing that out, I really hate having mistakes like that in my fic no matter how small, so I will actually go and nitpick through it today and correct any I can find. Thanks so much for bringing that to my attention!

I'm glad you liked the ending - it was going to be a lot longer originally but I got to that point and honestly just felt so naturally that I had to end it there, so I was worried it might come across as weirdly cut off, but thanks for saying it worked! As far as the humorous elements go, I really felt like I wanted to emphasise how young they both were (in a way to make it more tragic *evil laugh*) so I thought having those little moments of teenage humour, especially from Mary, would make it more realistic in a way. I'm glad you liked that!

Thank you for the lovely review hon < 3

~Maia


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