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Review:patronus_charm says:
Life is so hectic at the moment so apologies for the age in me getting here and the minuscule length of this review!

I really loved the darker side to this story with the beginning! I have a feeling something big and not so nice is about to happen and I can't wait to find out what it is. Ah, I can't seem to formulate what I have my head into words. Ok, here I go again. I really love how you've a negative impact of the war aftermath. It's just nice to see that the Death Eaters are angry and want revenge (obviously not for the Muggleborns but you get what I mean). It just makes it more accurate and realistic and really exciting about what's going to happen.

Also the anger Goyle sort of held for Malfoy was great as the shift in power is interesting to observe. Just all of these reactions from all of them are spot on in my opinion!

Two characters really stood out for me in this chapter. The first was Gamp because I still love him in the sense of him being an excellent villain. They're rather hard to come across, but seeing him here made me insanely happy as he's just so vindictive and merciless that it will be interesting to see what lengths he goes to.

Then Lucius! I loved how he stood up for his son and cursed Flint because I never thought he would do that for him with the way he was trying to persuade Draco into Gamp and all that lot. It will be interesting to watch him and see what his actions are because I just can't guess!

Great chapter!

Author's Response: Hi, Kiana!

First off, you should never apologize for sparing the time to let an author know what you thought about a chapter. We all know what a rare and wonderful thing it is.

The story has turned quite dark at this point. Draco is well beyond the point where he's going to humor Flint and Gamp. He watched his father grovel before the Dark Lord, so he knows where that kind of appeasement leads. He just wants to be left alone.

I'm not sure that Goyle is angry at Draco, per se. He's just faced with a choice: trust Gamp or trust Draco. At this point, Gamp has given Goyle a lot more reason to believe that he's trustworthy. I remember Crabbe in the Room of Requirement, telling Draco that he wasn't going to take orders from him. I always felt like there was some genuine resentment there for all the years that Draco treated them both like brainless lackeys.

After writing him into two stories, I've really come to enjoy Jeremy Gamp as a villain. He's ruthless and brutal and more than a little insane. You never know when he's going to snap.

Old Lucius really came through for Draco in this chapter, didn't he? I really struggle with trying not to make him more than he is. He is only a shadow of his former self and he's definitely losing his marbles, but even in his weakened state he's able to hold his own for a while against the likes of Gamp and Flint. They simply don't have the martial skills.

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for all of your awesome reviews and congratulations on your well-deserved Dobby!


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