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Review:harrietm says:
This story...wowsers. So different from anything I've read on this site before! So dark and mysterious and interesting! I don't really know how you're managing to weave such a heavyhanded plot to be honest, I even struggle with writing fluff haha! It's really good :) The characterisation of Albus in particular has been amazing, but of course also Rose and Scorpious. One thing I would say is that sometimes the flick between past and present is a bit disconcerting, not because of how you're writing, just because of the formating on the page, I don't know, maybe it needs a '~~~' or something just to separate it better. Otherwise the flashback kind of style is another thing that's making this story really cool to read :) keep it up and I look forward to the next update!

Author's Response: Hey thanks! You're definitely right about the shift in scene. I've tried to insert horizontal lines but for some reason they don't work on this chapter... I will go back and fix that and all future chapter will have the page breaks.

And thanks for your compliments. I'm the plot is actually cohesive . Not gonna lie, I was worried it would be too heavy handed and not make sense at all. I'm glad you're enjoying the story and characterizations :) ALbus is my absolute favorite to write so I'm glad you're enjoying his development. I have a few surprises in store for him ;)

And thanks for taking the time to review! It means a lot :)

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