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Review:charlottetrips says:
I started reading this totally not realizing it was about Dominique and Teddy, not Victoire and Teddy. It was good that you brought me up to speed on that in the beginning. I have to admit the "friends to more" trope is one of my favorites and one that I'll read every time. I only increased my pleasure at reading this cute one shot.

I like that in just one little one shot you gave a history of how they became friends and how they've held off on going further than that. You somehow managed to convey the viewpoints of two people in this. Now, as a warning, that can sometimes get distracting, but it worked out fine here.

There was some formal feeling to their words with each other sometimes, like when you didn't use contractions in their speech, but otherwise you were able to convey a comfortable friendship. This was especially obvious following the start of the picnic.

Teddy was so sweet in this. I loved how he went through so much effort to communicate his evolving of feelings for Dom. I get that it was partly to "get her in the mood" but I also see that it was mostly for her, getting her away from the stress of life, etc.

Very sweet overall!

Char

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Haha I am glad the beginning got you cleared up on the pairing. I love "friends to more" too so I am pleased you liked it.

Yeah I know it can get confusing and distracting with two viewpoints but it's a relief to know it worked okay.

I need to brush up on my dialogue yeah, i'll look into it =) Thanks for the tip.

Yeah, Teddy is a sweet darling. I wish he was real xP

Thank you!


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