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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums!

I quite liked this chapter, and the way Hermione and Draco are sort of warming up to each other. The plot is headed in a good direction.

I loved Hermione's characterisation here as she was quite realistic. The uncertainty with the letter, the presence of Hogwarts: A history, her over-analyzing and worrying - it was all nicely done. I also enjoyed her interaction with Harry and Ron, it was very sweet and pretty natural.

Also, the way Hermione interacts with Draco is also believable. They are slowly adapting to each other but have not entered the 'friend' stage yet and you seemed to be able to write the complexity of the situation well with all the awkwardness and stuff. I am also liking Draco here, he is not over-the-top Malfoy or too soft all of a sudden the way sometimes other writers portray him so that's good. I like the pace of this story and this chapter in particular since you're not moving too fast with their relationship as well as with the plot, and not too slow either so good job.

I liked the way you wrote Harry and Ron as well. They're two hard characters to write since we see so much of them in the books so what you've done is worth an applause. I can see that you were trying to make them as in-character as possible so good effort there. Their interaction with Hermione put a smile on my face though, so yay =)

My only suggestion there would be to ensure that you don't always show them in a stereotypical manner - like Ron constantly being angry - instead show his (and Harry's) acceptance of Draco through the story too so that would give the plot more depth. Of course that is only a suggestion and I am not quite sure how you've planned the plot further so if it doesn't align with your planning then feel free to ignore it.

Over all, I quite liked this chapter and I am interested to see how things go further, especially with Blaise & Pansy's arrival. Oh, and I also liked that flashback you gave, it showed a moment of bonding between Draco and Hermione which was nice. The transition from present to past and back was also smooth and the overall flow was good.

As I've mentioned before, I like the pace at which the story is going, and your characterisations are lovely. The descriptions are also good like your writing style, and all in all, I am enjoying the story and am curious to read further so feel free to re-request once the next chapter is up. The grammar was also okay, though there were some small typos here and there which can be fixed with a thorough re-read.

Good job!
9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi hi! So so sorry for the late response!

I'm glad you liked the chapter! I really enjoyed writing this chapter :D

I am super glad to hear that the characters are written really well, I always struggle with the main characters, so I am super happy that you think they are written well and are funny! :D

I will definitely look into the stereotypicalness of the boys, I understand where you come from with that, will change it , thanks for pointing it out :)

I am super happy you liked this chapter! I am loving this story and am really glad others are as well :D

Again, so sorry for the last response!

Grace :)


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