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Review:adluvshp says:
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This was a very sweet and adorable little one-shot. I enjoyed the image of two small children - Teddy and Victoire - pretending to be king and queen and dancing and fighting dragons and such. It put a smile on my face. Your descriptions were simple yet intricate and I liked that.

The ending was bittersweet which I also enjoyed - would have been kind of cliche if they had ended up together. I did like the reminiscing of Victoire though and how she hoped that Teddy would remember those times. It was believable.

The only CC I'd give you if any is that the ending segment was a bit redundant. It's like you were saying the same thing over and over again in different ways. I'd suggest polishing it a bit if you edit. Including more detail of the scene surrounding them could help - since the imagery in the first segment was pretty good.

Apart from that, this made for a very nice read and I liked it. Your grammar was okay, it flowed smoothly, and the writing style was interesting. Good job!

9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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