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Review:StellaRose says:
Hey there!

No worries, I feel like I've been MIA lately too! :)

A new man?! Say what?! lol. I was hoping Al would make a move. Ugh...friends with benefits? Not cool man, not cool.
That being said though, I think a little healthy competition will be just what Al needs to push him in the right direction!

I'm already planning the possibilities of the 'new man'. Maybe Longbottom or another one of her players? Ooooh maybe a Gryffie (that's not a Wotter). Guess I'll just have to read on :)

The only cc I have is that the scene in the Great Hall seems a bit rushed and out of place. It seems unrealistic that all of the characters would just magically appear at the Ravenclaw table. Maybe it's just me but I don't see the houses mixing that much during dinner time. It also seemed like the characters appeared out of thin air. Maybe just slow it down and add more description?

Besides that though, another great chapter! I'm loving your plot and I'm still hooked. See you next chapter :)

--Emmy

Author's Response: Aw, well no worries - I'm glad you're back now!

I think we were all hoping Al would man up and make a move, too! Healthy competition...hmm...you seem to be on the right track!

Those are some good guesses!

Ah, I agree! I'll try to keep that in mind when writing later future GH scenes! Thank you for your opinion and thoughts!

Thank you! xx


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