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Review:PitchBlue says:
Yay a new chapter! :D I was really curious to read this, especially after you said you had some writer's block.

I think Sirius and Gemma's reactions were extreme but believable and in-character. It's good that you don't portray Sirius as the perfect handsome bloke, because a lot of fics do that. He's a real person and has faults, like his seperation anxiety and illogical behaviour when he's worried.

It's great to see how you gradually build this up in the previous chapters - we get little hints, changes in their behaviour and everything which makes this all so believable and natural.

The thing I loved the most about this chapter was the description of Gemma's Room of Requirement. It all fits perfectly with her character and it makes me so curious where you're going to take this!!! I could totally see everything before me: the pictures, notes, the pieces of yarn... It's like a peek into Gemma's mind! Amazing chapter as always, Carly :D

Author's Response: The writer's block came during the fight. I wasn't worried about Gemma's reaction (as she's been planned out from the beginning and an extension of myself) but it was hard for me to get into Sirius' head. Like, I knew what I wanted him to do, but I was having trouble getting to his core motivations to understand WHY he would do it.

So yeah, that's why it gets all introspective at the end, because I wanted to show his faults, as you said. Nobody is perfect - and I figure that Sirius had a rough transition away from his family, hence the no strings attached flings he's used to having. But I'll get into that more in the next chapter ...

It's funny, I've never actually planned out a story before. I used to just build upon the previous chapter with no story outline/arc at all, but now that I've planned every character's development out, it's easy for me to drop hints in other people's chapters. It's also fun to write a character's individual chapter and then have other people react to them - like, we all know what Gemma saw in her dream, but Sirius doesn't, so that's why he feels so detached.

And yeah, speaking of the dream, I'm glad you liked her slow descent into madness (I don't know any other way to describe it, haha). Have you ever seen A Beautiful Mind? It's kind of like that, only not :P

Thanks for the review, I'm interested to see what you think of the next chapter ;)


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