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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! Thank you for entering my challenge! :D

I was so excited that you chose Walburga since she truly is an unexpected character, and you're right in thinking this story is pretty original. I think you're extending it to a novel? That is really cool, and I think there's so many aspects of Walburga's life and the transformation into the horrible woman we know as Sirius' mum to be explored.

I love your first sentence. The dynamic between Walburga and Kreacher is an interesting one that I never really questioned before reading this story. I find that we expect all purebloods to treat their house elves as horribly as the Malfoys did, but Kreacher clearly had a great attachment to Walburga and I think you're developing that here, that she could be kind to him and appreciate him. But the first line, about how nobody ever counted Kreacher as a person, said volumes about the way the purebloods think of house elves.

I really love Walburga's voice here, even the dark thoughts that stew beneath her exterior. It's interesting how she's going to turn into the woman who will hate her son for having similar rebellious ideas. I enjoyed her disgust with all the purebloods, and the descriptions and explanations of Abraxas and Orion. (By the way, I had no idea they were second cousins! That makes a lot of sense, seeing as they had the same last name!). I also thought the descriptions of how she felt about Muggles was quite interesting, and how much the Muggle war has affected the wizards. When Walburga was comparing a Muggle Christmas to a wizarding Christmas I could really feel the undertones of longing for the poor girl.

I'm curious to see how you'll play with the time period and the particular setting of pureblood London more in the next chapters. Looking forward to the next one! :)

Author's Response: Hey!

This is in fact going to be a novel- this was a bit of an introductory chapter. But I'm glad you find this interesting! It took a lot of thinking and time- and I'm still not happy with it. It relieves me that you think I portrayed it well.

Thanks so much for the challenge!

-Janelle


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