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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums.

This was another interesting chapter. I loved the conversation McGonagall and Dumbledore had in the beginning. The way you wrote their interaction was very realistic, and their relationship got reflected very well through it. I was amazed at how nicely you could write Dumbledore, I always struggle with him if I have to write him, but I think you did a fine job so congrats =)

I also really liked the part where Sadie looks at her reflection and marvels at her clean clothes and stuff. It was a sweet, touching, and believable scene. The way Dumbledore assured her was nice, and I liked how he was able to understand her signs/thoughts. Her fear and distrust is very justified but I like how she's gradually letting her walls down and the way she reflected over it - it was a natural human reaction and I liked that.

I am curious to know about what actually happened to her - what 'thing' they put on her - and what about her glasses. I am enjoying the mystery surrounding her as it definitely ups the level of interest. Looking forward to see how she interacts with the others and the way the plot deepens.

Your descriptions were pretty good in this chapter, and your grammar was fine. I can see your writing style has improved since the previous chapters so yay =) I don't have any CC to offer you.

Feel free to re-request!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This was an awesome review!

Writing McGonagall and Dumbledore turned out to be a challenge, but I'm glad I did it. I really love both of them as characters and in my mind think they have a nice friendship, so it was fun to get to show that. Fun, but hard. LOL. Glad you enjoyed it!

As for the scene with Sadie, I really wanted to find a way to show how grateful she was, but still how awed she was by this change in her life. The new clothes seemed to be a good way to do it. And I love any chance i get to show Dumbledore all nice and caring. :)

Oh, you picked up on some of those clues I dropped did you. You're the only one so far to comment on the "thing". Good eyes! As for the answers to those questions, I'm going to be cliched and tell you to keep reading. LOL.

Thank you! I'm glad my writing is improving. I'm trying hard to write my best.

Thanks again! Amazing review, as always.


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