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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums!

This was an interesting chapter and I liked the way you explained things. The way Hermione and Draco dealt with the information and all, was also realistic. I like this Dr. Cartwright also, he seems nice. I wonder why the war situation can't be revealed to them, though. I hope you build up on that in the upcoming chapters.

I liked how Draco and Hermione called a truce in the end. The way you wrote it was believable, like they did it because they had to, which aligned well with their 'history' and personalities. You've set up a major plot device in this chapter, of Draco & Hermione to spend the next one month in the house, and you've done it really well since it has my curiosity piqued and I'd love to see how things unfold further.

The only small CC I have for you is that there were a few minor grammar mistakes here and there. For instance, at one point you write "you're" instead of "your", and "had completely forgot" instead of "had completely forgotten" etc. These are little typos that can be easily fixed with a quick re-read =) Besides that, I quite liked this chapter and don't think there's any more CC to give you on it.

Your descriptions were good, characterisations interesting so far, plot well-thought, flow smooth, and pace even... so good job! Keep writing, and feel free to re-request!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

P.S. I am quite enjoying this story so adding it to my favourites =)

Author's Response: Hello! So sorry for the late response, I have been laden with work, as you know!

I'm really glad o hear you thought the way they handled the information was realistic. I wanted to make their conditions as real as possible to make it more believable. Dr Cartwright is a cool character, he makes a couple more reappearances, which is awesome.

Ahh, that get's revealed in about four so chapters time! Guess you'll just have to come back and read :P

Oh man, I am the happiest person now, I am SO SO GLAD that you find them believable. I am trying hard to keep them to canon, which is rather a challenge. The sickness and being stuck in the house is something I plan to work a lot on. I wanted something that would equalize them so a chance at a friendship would possible. Hopefully it's worked!

I will look into those grammar errors definitely, there are always some that my beta and I can't spot!

Oh yay! I'm so happy you think its going good :) Aww, this review made my crazy day so much better :)

:O and you faved!? Thank you!! :) Will hopefully update within the next week :)

Grace xx


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