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Review:adluvshp says:
Hi there. Here for your requested review from the forums. Apologies for the delay.

I think this was an interesting chapter. I like the direction things are headed in. You definitely set up an important plot device here - of Anaxandra moving in a protective house and Draco being her 'warden' and having to stay with her for large durations. I like it =)

Draco's boss is an amusing character, though he does make me slightly nervous xP I wonder if he knows more than he is letting on, or if he has an ulterior motive or something, but maybe I am just reading into things. Nonetheless, you've definitely established an air of intrigue which is good for the narrative.

I also like how Draco is thoughtful of sorts and is kept some information about Anaxandra to himself. He seems to be exercising caution and thinking before saying/doing anything which is a good character trait. I am enjoying how you write him, and he definitely seems to have undergone character development from the previous chapter which is awesome.

I also am liking Ana's character very much (her full name is a mouthful haha). She is very headstrong and independent, someone definitely suited for Draco, and the way they interact is interesting to read. Some parts even made me giggle here (of their interaction). I also liked how they're not immediately warming up to each other. I like to see the gradual evolution of 'relationships' in stories, and I was pleased to see that you're headed on that track, so good job.

The chapter flowed smoothly and the pace of the story is even. It is all very interesting and the plot is certainly one that piques curiosity. Your characters are well-developed, and your writing style is pretty good. I like your descriptions as well - not too heavy and not too little. I think the story is going great so far, and this chapter was definitely a good read, so keep going =)

I don't have any CC for you. Feel free to re-request!

9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi :) And thank you for reviewing!

I'm glad he makes you nervous, he's supposed to :P And you get a little more of him in later chapters.

Draco, in the position that he's in, doesn't really have the room to risk his boss thinking he's a liar or just crazy. I'm glad you enjoy how I write him! I'm having a difficult time with him.

I'm glad that you like her! Yeah, imagine writing chapters with her full name all the time lol. Such a mouthful. Keyboard full? Lol! And I'm glad that their interaction is fun to read.

You're so nice! :) I'm glad you like my story!


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