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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hello again! I'm writing this review on my phone with longish fake nails so bear with me. :p

This was a fantastic chapter! I think I already read it though because the news of Danny being a suspect didn't surprise me at all but if I hadn't read it, I probably would have had a hunch but it was written well! :)

However, I did notice something that was a bit off. It was this bit:

He knew Rose Weasley for 14 years, and she never fails to surprise him.

It just sounded a bit odd to me. You've put the chapter in past tense but this sounds like a mix of present and past.

Maybe try:

He'd known Rose Weasley for 14 years and she still never failed to surprise him.

Or something along those lines. :p

I loved the little bit at the end though! So Cara is alive but she's being held hostage?! I didn't remember THAT twist!

Anywho, this was a great chapter and hopefully soon I'll be able to catch up! :D

- Kayla. :)

Author's Response: Hello! (: thank you for reading and reviewing.
I'll definitely get on changing that sentence. Tenses are my biggest grammatical downfall!

There's a LOT more to Cara's story than her just being Danny's friend! And it'll be revealed slowly bit by bit, but soon you will find out! (:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


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