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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hey Kristin! I'm going on. :) The fact this was written from Peter's POV was unusual, but I think you captured him just right.

And so this was your first angsty fic - I really wouldn't have guessed. You just wrote the dark atmosphere so well. :)

I loved how you wrote Peter - I felt so sorry for him, especially towards the end when he was trying to deal with his guilt, but what he did was just unforgiveable. I don't know what I want to do with him! I loved how you had him reflect on how it had 'taken him mere minutes' to give up all the informatin, and I thought it was a really nice touch, how you had him feeling so guilty. It showed that he knew what he was doing and he hated himself for it, and I think you wrote that really powerfully.

Ah, why was Peter a Gryffindor? He should have been in Slytherin, he was so sly and manipulative. Pushing all the blame onto Remus is such a clever, cunning thing to do. Gradually just feeding the little doubts into their minds was just so manipulative. He might have seemed like a Gryffindor to everyone, but when it comes right down to it, he'll always choose himself.

One thing I loved was you including the cat in the story. It was such a lovely touch, to add in a moment with the Potters' cat. It was just so sweet, and I loved how you stuck to canon.

Also, rereading it, I just noticed you switch tenses at the beginning and end. It flowed really well as well. In fact the whole story flowed really well, so well done there!

A great story Kristin, I loved it. :D

Author's Response: Ah! Your reviews literally have me bouncing off the walls today. I need trampoline walls at this rate.

I'm so happy to hear that you think Peter was written well! He's a really difficult character to write, so it's really great to hear that you think I did him justice. And thanks about the dark atmosphere! I'm so glad that came across well!

Hmm. Personally, I think Peter might have been a Gryffindor because he valued qualities like bravery and loyalty, even if he couldn't always be brave and loyal like he wanted to (and that's where a lot of his guilt comes from in this piece - that he knows he should have acted differently).

Once I remembered the Potters had a cat, I knew I'd have to work it in there somehow. There's no way I couldn't, what with Peter being a rat and all.

Thank you so much for your reviews! ♥ ♥ ♥ *is sending you a large cake in the post*

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