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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hello Kristin! Be proud of me-I'm leaving a review! I was browsing the recently updated section and saw the title and thought 'that sounds like exactly the kind of title Kristin would think of' and then I looked at the author and guess what? It was you! :P

I really loved reading this, I think you captured Luna really well here. Some authors go over the top and just make her plain weird in an attempt to capture her quirkiness, but I think you did really well writing her, so well done there! Hercharacterisation was all in order and I love how you kept telling us about the clouds. Memories from Hogwarts. :)And I loved Luna's umbrella, it was a really nice touch.

I liked Mortimer Vespasian-Marlowe, you charactrised him well. I love how you pointed out to us that he's willing to go beyond the magic he dislikes and accept a person by getting Luna to make him admit he would have been sad if his sister stayed at Hogwarts for the holidays. And if you were able to understand that incredible convoluted sentence I congratulate you.

There's just one plot hole I picked up - at first you stated that the Streeler changes colour every hour, but the Streeler by the desk change colour three times throughout the course of the story. Unless you mean to say that Mortimer Vespasian-Marlowe stayed at the shop for two hours? In that case, ignore this. :)

I think the flow of the story was pretty good, although there were a couple of places where it slowed down a bit, it didn't detract from my enjoyment of the story at all.

All in all, this was a wonderful one-shot Kristin, I really enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Oh my goodness - was not expecting THREE reviews from you today! You really went to town on my AP, haha. Thanks so much! ♥

Haha, I love how you found the story. I didn't know my titles were that distinctive! :p

That's so wonderful to hear that you liked the way I wrote Luna. I had never written her at all before, so I had no idea how it would turn out. The way I see her, she's very perceptive, but not always about the things people usually focus on - hence her preoccupation with clouds!

I'm glad you liked Mortimer too. I do understand what you're trying to say! He is supposed to be just a really pretentious person who's the opposite of Luna, but still has some weird tendencies after all - we all do! And I think Luna makes people think more, so she made him see that about himself.

With the Streeler, I meant that it had changed colour when Luna was just waiting around in the shop - if I remember, the second time it changed was before Mortimer even walked in. Maybe I should go back and check that though - thanks :p

Thanks so much for reading, and for your lovely reviews today!!! You're the best!


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