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Review:Debra20 says:
There are no proper words to explain how sorry I am for this late review. Real life kidnapped me from online life very unexpectedly and only now could I truly sit down and pay the deserved attention this story requires.

After I finished this chapter, I remembered why I offered to read this story without you requesting. I remember the attraction I felt for the whole mystery that revolved around the Prologue, and thought this chapter did not help shed a lot of light on WHO this girl is, at least now we have a setting, some names and a plot that's set into motion. So, let's dig in!

Characterization: Something is quite clear about characterization - you are amazing at it! I feel I have absolutely no criticism to offer on this part. Minerva feels like a real living human being and is completely in character with her decision to stay at Hogwarts for the summer, her habit of poring over books in her spare time and the way she reacts to different events (like Ophelia revealing the whereabouts of this mysterious Sadie). She feels incredibly in character with her brisk, slightly impatient yet caring nature. There's no doubt that you have no problem writing canon characters.

As for the original characters, Ophelia is another example to stand for what I've said earlier about your undeniable skill at handling characterization. Her quirks and perks makes the reader connect to her instantly! She feels part of the story from the moment she appeared with her way of going around the subject and her bubbly speech. She uses knitting to keep Sadie from escaping? How brilliant is that?! I loved reading about her! I hope she is a constant character in the story because I'd love to see more depth to her.

Sadie is still a mysterious character that I can't say lots about. It's clear she is traumatized and the last seven years of her life have been anything but peaceful, but this shroud of mystery surrounding her prevent me from forming an opinion. However, I am eager to find out more!

Description: You knocked this out of the park as well. Your imagery is very vivid, very colorful with enough details to give us a view of everything that's going on. I especially appreciate the fact that you don't overly burden the prose with descriptions, just enough to allow us to immerse in the story. I find that reaching this balance is a tricky part of writing.

Plot: The seeds of the plot have been planted (at least some of them). This mysterious girl seems to be the center of something big that's about to happen judging McGonagall's reaction. It's clear that she's pretty important and I am very curious to know why! Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: There is absolutly no need to be sorry. I'm quite slow responding myself, but more than that, I don't mind. I know all about real life and I am just honored you liked the story enough to return when you had the chance.

This review left me smiling a lot. It's so nice to request reviews and have people so wonderful and willing to read your stuff, but there is something truly special about readers who come of their own accord. I thank you a lot.

And I'm glad you are intrigued and wanting to know more!

You really think I'm amazing at characterization? WOW! Thanks! I try so hard with it and have to work really hard and sometimes I wonder if I'm just making a mess of things. So nice to hear I'm doing okay then. So, thank you very much!

I had a lot of fun with Ophelia, and it has made me very happy that most people have seemed to connect with and like her. Sadly, she's not intended to be a main character in this story. She'll be back, but not for a long time. :( Had I known how much people would like her, I might have plotted differently, but it's too late now. LOL.

I know my reveal of Sadie is quite slow, but I'm so glad you are still eager to find out more.

Aw., thanks again! Now I'm blushing once more. Description is something else that makes me nervous. I know my style of using it isn't everyone's cup of tea, so it is nice to hear when people like it.

Maybe Sadie is the center of something big (love it when people make guesses!) or maybe McGonagall's just having an emotional day? hehehehe

Thanks. I hope when life calms down for you a bit you'll come back and find out more about Sadie and this Plot. You are amazing. :)

- Farmgirl


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