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Review:charlottetrips says:
Holy Shamoly!!

It's been a long while since I've been taken with the prose of a story, but you've succeeded here! I really love the lyrical and fairytale quality you've put into this story. The way that the words flow together and the manner in which you've written it, really calls to mind a whimsical tale that one would get told around a great hearthfire.

I love that you took it upon yourself to write a little song in the beginning.

The omniscient viewpoint you've taken on this works very well. I get a glimpse of everything and even am able to pick up bits of the characters without being limited to just one point of view. I know that sometimes this doesn't work for others, but it does for me, and especially in this type of setting: a fairytale setting.

I think you've done a wonderful job of setting up your story. You string me from the present(ish) on down to the past, inviting me to be a part of the story with the questions of "Can you see it?" etc. that you have woven throughout.

Really quite excited to keep reading this so am putting it on my nifty new "currently reading" list!


Author's Response: Hello! :)

Ah, thank you so much! This is one of my favourite stories to write, so I'm really excited that you liked it. I'm pleased to know the fairytale-like tone of the writing came across, and I liked imagining this story as a sort of legend that would be passed through the generations. Your idea of the hearthfire is perfect!

Haha, the songs were just fun to add!

It's great that you liked the point of view of the narration. I was a bit worried that readers might not engage with the story as well as with first person (which is my normal go-to) but it seemed to fit the fairytale quality and of course add to the idea of it being a story or legend being re-told.

I'm glad this story pulled you in and took you on that journey back in time! Like I said, this story is kind of my baby, so knowing someone else likes it is so lovely.

Thank you for leaving me this excellent review! :D

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