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Review:nott theodore says:
Erm... wow. I feel like this chapter was a real turnaround from the first, with things getting gradually more cynical and sinister. It's hard to know what to say about this because I'm just taken aback by your writing.

Once again, your descriptions are beautiful, even if sometimes the images they evoke aren't exactly pretty. The way you wrote about Hogwarts made me feel like I was seeing it again for another time after reading about it through seven books and seeing it in the films.

Ah, the famous balcony scene! I wondered if you were going to include it and I liked the fact that you chose for it to take place in the Astronomy Tower as well, because it worked with the whole tone of the chapter. The cynical and almost satirical aspect came through here, with the fact that you're poking fun at the cliches and even pointing out how ridiculous it is that two teenagers 'fall in love' so quickly, even in the play (and I have to agree with that!). It's quite mocking, really, and I thought that it added to the idea that a story like this can't end well.

The characterisation of Rose and Scorpius is very intriguing; at times I can't even say which of the two is Romeo and which is Juliet. The second scene of the chapter was when I felt that things began to get a lot darker and more sinister. Behind the love story there's something much more calculating going on, both with Scorpius and Montague (Mercutio, I think?) and with Rose. I feel like perhaps Scorpius and Montague are underestimating her abilties and her intelligence if they're planning to somehow hurt her.

I'm so curious how things will end in this story. Whereas in Romeo and Juliet, it seems like fate that leads them to the tragic end, here I feel like Rose and Scorpius are going to be more responsible for what happens, as if they're setting out to destroy each other...

Sian :)

Author's Response: Yes, you've read it correctly! There's something ominous running through this chapter, with imagery that should be romantic and youthful, yet isn't. I like how you call it cynical and sinister because that foreshadows well for the final act. :D It means a lot to hear that you liked the style of this chapter, its imagery and darkness. Part of it has to do with writing this particular group of Slytherins because there's so much social politics going on in that scene, and Scopius tries to keep himself on the outside of it, but because he's a Malfoy, he can't escape it. Those kind of social interactions between people are too much fun to write, with much opportunity for double-entendres, slippery language, and so on.

What I especially love to hear is that this story has made you see Hogwarts in a new way, too. That's a fantastic compliment! ^_^

It's funny because the astronomy tower was, at least for a time, a very famous location in romance novels on HPFF - I don't know why, but it was a favourite spot for lovers to meet, so the scene in this story also pays tribute to that cliche. I'm interested in the mocking tone of this chapter and will have to re-read it to see in what way it appears - I don't want it to be too heavy-handed, with too much of my own dislike of these cliches showing through.

Ah, yes! You're supposed to be uncertain as to which is Romeo and which is Juliet - it goes back and forth quite frequently in this story, which is another reason why I enjoyed writing it. There's a lot of instability throughout, and that's key to how the whole story came together.

Thank you again for your wonderful reviews! It's very interesting to see how you're reacting to the various elements of this story, and I look forward to seeing how the third act hits you. ;)


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