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Review:BLONDEbehaviour says:
Hi again!

I really enjoyed this chapter! I would've been exactly like Rose, sunburnt and red all over! I about as fair as they get and even 20 minutes in the sun can make me burn. So I can relate. God, I'd die in Egypt!

I think you did very well with developing Dalila! She seems like a very neat and interesting character, and I really hope that we get to know more about her and her family, as I really like her! Was that fate Rose meeting her like that, and her being a perfumer or what!

In regards to Scorpius I also think you introduced his character well. And he was a Ravenclaw! I found that a bit of a plot twist. Very neat. I like that she found the one person she was looking for in the midst of a crowd, and she basically just 'bumped' into him. But you did it in a way that wasn't cliched either. Just happened to be in the right place at the right time.

Only saw one grammar spot. The line "There is a little office area behind here. We can sit there, as it should be away from the shade" Is shade supposed to be sun? I'm just guessing, as I'm sure it was shade she wanted!

This was a very cool chapter, can't wait to see what happens next!

Grace

Author's Response: Hi Grace!

Haha, I'm one of those few people who only tan but I've heard from my friends how terrible it is.

I'm glad that you liked Dalila as I really enjoy writing her. You definitely will get to know more about her and her family as they play a key part later on. Yes, but you may question the fate later on.

Him being a Claw may have been a little bias from me :P I'm so glad that you didn't find it cliched because the whole suddenly seeing each other has been done an awful lot before so it did make me worried about doing it.

That was probably a Freudian slip on my behalf with wanting the sun and not shade! Thanks for pointing it out, I'll fix it now!

Thanks for another great review, and I hope you like what happens next!

-Kiana


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