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Review:Erised says:
Having exhausted all of your one-shots, this leads me onto your WIP! So my stance with Dramione is that I don't mind it. I know some people absolutely detest it and refuse to read it but I am not one of those people! So you're safe with me ;)

I like the setup you've created here. Hermione being angry with Ron for snogging Lavender is a natural point for the story to start because it gives Hermione a reason to be reckless and not like herself. Draco is also having the difficulties with the Vanishing Cabinet and fearing for his and his family's lives, and so is perhaps more vulnerable and fraught than usual. Either way they're both not feeling happy! This makes the potential relationship more plausible which is good to see.

The banter and arguments between Draco and Hermione were believable also and made this beginning realistic as it's what we're used to seeing from the two of them. I liked how you used some JKR insults in there! Although it's interesting that Draco actually felt affected by what Hermione had said. I wonder what's changed with him?...

I think perhaps Draco's sudden affection towards Hermione - like thinking she is beautiful - is perhaps a little too premature, and there were a couple of spelling issues, but otherwise this is a very good start.

Nice work Nadia!

Author's Response: Jenny, I'm always scared and kind of panicking when people I know over at the forums, read this story. It was my first and it's not very good... and almost everyone over there that I talk to detest Dramione... so I'm kind of happy that you got over that bridge and read this :)

This like most plots, came while I was sleeping. Well, before I was sleeping haha... I tried to make it as believable as possible but not all dramiones are perfect, we have to bend the rules around but - I tried. I'm glad you found it okay :D

Ugh, I know. Big plot hole. The whole," I love Hermione" thing... I need to go back and make that more believable. I feel really bad because I feel as if I just thrusted it onto the readers and characters to fall in love. I really need to edit that...

I know :/ I haven't touched the first chapters in a million years haha... I really need to get working on that :P Maybe when the queue dies down and I don't have tons of homework.. we shall see :)

Thanks for stopping by again!


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