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Review:Erised says:
Well, this was definitely a really interesting and original take on Moaning Myrtle. I loved this for a number of reasons, but firstly I'd like to say again how awesome it is that you're trying out new styles and this darker, grittier one really suits you in my opinion. More pieces like this please! ;)

So, your portrayal of Moaning Myrtle, a character which is rarely written or thought about really, was wonderful. I never really thought of the darker side of Myrtle's life and death and how she was emotionally abused in both, and you wrote her thoughts and feelings on the matter so well. The constant flow of hateful students coming in to her toilet must be genuinely awful to experience.

Her mentioning the trio and Draco as friends almost or at least 'special' made more of an impact because of this. As the only people who had thought of her as more than Moaning Myrtle they must have made her life a little more worthwhile and them leaving and forgetting about her makes me really feel for Myrtle as a reader. Serious props to you on the feels there!

I loved the hints of how different Myrtle was when she was alive too, despite the bullying. She seemed like more of a happy and smiling person, and death has actually brought her down in a sense. Who knows if that's what she was actually like in real life but it created a nice contrast in her character and worked for the prompt too.

The description here was fabulous! It really added to the inner monologue of exactly what Myrtle was experiencing and I could imagine myself there with her. I particularly loved "I will also take your joys, your firsts and your lasts. I will take your life, if you would wish death over it." - such a great line that sums up Myrtle really.

Another excellent one-shot lovely, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Hi again :D

Again, thank you so much for telling me that it's original. It's such a lovely thing to hear :) Really? *drops the fluffy pen and picks up the unused angst one* I shall try this more often then!

To be entirely honest, I hadn't thought much about her either. Till this challenge came along and then, this was the only thing that fit, in my opinion. I just had the idea in my head and had to write it out. I'm glad you enjoyed it and liked the portrayal. I know that it's food for thought! Her whole experience would have been quite sad, and I took the chance and wrote about it.

Aw, thank you! I'm glad I managed to get that right. They were the only once who ever gave her a second thought, and in her lonely world, they would have certainly made an impact.

I tried to give these little tips about her earlier life to make her relate-able and to let us understand her better. Despite the bullying, she had a life. I'm glad you liked how I used to add to her character :) Thanks!

Again, description is SO important. I'm glad you enjoyed it here :) I know that it's a little sparse on the dialogue (intentionally!), so I was really hoping that the description would shine. Thanks for the lovely compliment and the review! :) I'm happy you enjoyed it.



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