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Review:Indigo Seas says:
Here for the exchange!

Gah, I love NextGen to pieces. There's just so much freedom involved in writing and reading it, and because of it, I have no idea where this story is going. It's great.

You've set your characters up very strongly, and I feel like I have a good idea of who they are even though I've only finished the first chapter. Though Rose didn't have a lot of dialogue, you still allow the reader to see her inner mindset, which is great. I'm looking forward to the subsequent chapters, so I'll get even more of an idea of what makes Rose tick!

And you use such interesting verbs! That's sort of an odd compliment, but what I mean is that your word choice makes the writing shine that much more. For example, saying that Rose's copper hair "burnt" is just such an original way of putting her hair color. You've got a whole bunch of these interesting words scattered through the entire chapter, and I loved it.

Your pacing is great, too. I love how this chapter moved pretty fluidly, and you managed to pack a lot of information into it without it seeming forced. You've got a really great start to a story, and you've just told the reader enough to peak their interest without going overboard in exposition. Really, really nice job.

I'm looking forward to the next chapters! I'll do more reviews as the week goes on, and hopefully I'll be able to read all of it sometime soon.

xx Rin

Author's Response: Hi Rin!

I know that's why I love them too because they're just so great for suspense.

I'm glad that you found that I set up the characters well, I think that's the thing which makes me most paranoid about first chapters. I enjoyed delving into Rose's mind as it was a lot of fun so yay for you liking it too.

I've never had that said to me before but it means a lot. I hadn't actually realised my obscure word and verb choice until just now when I went to read it back over to see. I'll try and keep it up as it's nice to play around.

I'm glad that you found that the pacing was ok too, as I worked hard at it in this chapter due to me used to dumping information onto readers and over-estimating their absorption capacity.

Thanks for such an awesome review, and I hope to get to more chapters of Magnolia Street too!

-Kiana


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