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Review:800 words of heaven says:
REVIEW TAG!

You have no idea how long it took me to decide which story I would read and review. First of all, you're an amazing writer, and practically anything that comes out of your figurative quill is bound to be amazing, so really, I had to pick ONE story/chapter to gush over. Do you realise how difficult that is? Also, fifty-six stories? That's such an amazing achievement in time and dedication alone, before we even begin to consider the actual calibre of the writing. Eventually, I decided to pick this one because I've never actually read any of your humour/comedy, except Pride and Pestilence, which I'm not counting here because it follows a completely different set of rules.

Anyway, onto the actual review!

Literally one paragraph in, and all I want to know about is "the Rose issue" and why one would need to take a few days to fix it. Obviously, it's not something that can be sorted out over a weekend, BUT I REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT IT IS.

My first impression of Albus is completely based on his impressions on Scorpius. Is Albus really dismissing him on such a superficial basis, or is there more to it? It seems like a really silly thing to do, and to me, it speaks a lot about Albus' character already.

"There simply wasnít a convenient Dark Lord prancing around anymore." I had the strangest mental image of Voldemort galloping through the wreckage of Hogwarts after the final battle. In other words, the line was super funny for me.

Okay, I totally dissed Albus for being so superficial earlier, but I see too much of myself in him to really hate him. He's actually quite endearing in a way. So is Scorpius for that matter, but in a different sense. I'm looking forward to seeing how their relationship changes over time, and how their two personalities will interact with each other. From a character development point of view, I think this story is going to be a lot of fun!

I totally loved this chapter, in all of its short glory. As I've already mentioned, I'm excited about where these characters will be going, in both a literal and figurative sense. I hope to be back for chapter two soon!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for these compliments! The 56 doesn't feel like that many, not over 9 years, but it means a lot to hear that it's such an achievement. I haven't thought very much about it, and I probably should. :D

Haha, the Rose issue is either her relationship with someone the family doesn't like - not Scorpius in this case, for once - or it's that she's decided to run off to another country to take on an unexpected job. I can't remember what exactly I had in mind, and I have a terrible feeling that it's something I entirely forgot after writing the first chapter. *hides*

Albus is actually dismissing Scorpius on a superficial basis. For someone who prides himself on being a detective, Albus is seriously narrow-minded, and in this story, his narrow-mindedness is clearest when he discusses gender and gender norms. Albus sees Scorpius as not masculine enough, and he reads the main female character in a similar way in later chapters. I like to make my main characters problematic, and it's great that you noticed this problem of Albus's so soon. He has his moments, and is for the most part, an okay guy, but this is one of his particular character flaws, and it has a significant effect on the plot. It also opens the door for some solid character development as the story continues.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this story! I'm very glad that you enjoyed the first chapter!


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