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Review:academica says:
Hey, I'm here from Review Tag! I hope you don't mind that I skipped to chapter two; I figured these could be read separately and I was really curious about how your take on Crabbe might play out.

Anyway, your version of Crabbe's afterlife is interesting. I liked how he entertained the thought of burning down Hogwarts and being single-handedly responsible for Harry's demise. I find a sort of poetic justice in him being tormented by an insect; the way Crabbe and Goyle trailed after Malfoy all the time reminds me of a fly annoyingly chasing after a person. Your description of the cold and the insect is slightly reminiscent of themes from Dante's depiction of the Inferno, too.

I did feel like the flow was slightly rough here, though, perhaps because of the tense you used. That may be something you want to check into with requested reviews or a beta. A beta could also help smooth over the couple typos I found--though there aren't many and they don't really detract from the piece all that much.

Good work, especially with a difficult character!


Author's Response: I don't mind at all you skipping to Crabbe. This one was pretty difficult for me, since I have never really been able to see much from his point of view and definitely cannot relate to his character.

I def agree about the flow and need to take some time out to revise and review it...Maybe after this NaNo stuff calms down! :)

Thanks for the great review as always! :)

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