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Review:randomwriter says:
Hello! Here from review tag!
(I'm late I know... I'm sorry!)

Okay. So I'd said that I would review 'The Wandering one'. But this REALLY caught my eye. The summary seemed so beautiful and I'd also entered this challenge myself. I figured I'd give it a read.

I am SO glad I picked this one. Now I'm going to consider it a shame if I haven't read every story that you've ever posted.

Well... HOW did you write something so beautiful? It's simply incredible. I have tears in my eyes right now, and I don't mind one bit.

I couldn't figure out who you were talking about in the beginning... I thought it might be Andromeda... but as the story unfolded, I realized that it was Tonks all along and I thought that it was really cleverly done. It was interesting. How you wrote about her relationship with Andromeda. It's almost like she still loves her dearly and this is a side of her that I haven't ever read about before.

I think that you write incredibly well. I would say that this is absolutely breathtakingly beautiful, but that wouldn't do justice to this story. Nope. Not even close.

I'm trying to pick out lines to quote. To tell you how much they left me gasping in wonder, but I simply cannot pick. Every word of this is nothing less than perfect.

I'm running out of things to say because I'm still in the hush. You know that kind of hush that engulfs you when you're so taking aback by something? I feel like my mind has traveled and learned and ages during the span of this one-shot. I know that it's a weird thing to say, but I can't think of any better way to describe how stunning this was.

I love the imagery and the symbolism. I love the contrast between them; like fire and ice. I love the phrases you've used and you've written this so carefully. Not a single word seems out of place. Every thing, every word has added to the story to make it so heartbreaking, in a very good way though.

The ending killed me a little. I kept hoping that she would stay and be reunited with Andromeda. I've never seen Narcissa like this before, and it was a side of her I really liked. I thought that if she had stayed, Andromeda might have chosen to speak to her and they could have said good bye to Tonks together. But alas. You took this piece of angst and you turned it into art. I can't think of any better way of putting it.

As I said before, if I had to pick one thing that made this story what it is, it is your descriptions and your sense of vivid imagery. I loved it. I love how you neglected dialogue completely. It is a style of writing that I am familiar with, and that I often use, myself. But I have never written anything so absolutely lasting.

I think you used the quote given to you very well, and you certainly get full points for creativity from my side. You thought of it in a very innovative way, and I'm really happy you won this challenge. you truly deserved it.

I'm finding it really hard to write this review. Mainly because there's SO much I really want to say, and I'm not entirely sure how. I can't do justice to your story in a 6000 word review when I'm still in the aforementioned state of being in a 'hush'.

I think you should write such things more often, and do shoot me a link somehow. I will be the first one there and I'll real it a hundred times.

I know I shouldn't be apologising. Not really. But I have to. Because I'm going to end this review very soon and I will remember a hundred other things that I have to say as soon as I clock on send. I'll send you a PM sometime, telling you just how much I loved this.

This is definitely going to favourites. And I'll probably read it once every few days.

You are absolutely brilliant. Keep up the great work :) I LOVED it.

Author's Response: Hi! Wow, this review is actually amazing, thank you so much! :) I loved every word of it and getting your praise on this one-shot was lovely! Thank you! :D

This story kind of wrote itself, when the reader finds out who Narcissa is and was talking to that was pretty much the same point I figured it out as well! It was so exciting to write and I loved channeling Narcissa's emotion, so I'm very thrilled you liked it and thought it worked. :) I'm also pleased you thought it was an original side to Narcissa.

I think I have a bit of the hush from this lovely review! :P

I was so tempted to let Narcissa stay and talk with Andromeda at the end, but it felt right that for now she would maintain that distance. She isn't as brave as she'd like to be, and I didn't think she would be ready yet to be vulnerable after years of idealizing. I love your comment about turning angst into art! Thank you!

I'm glad you liked the style of stream of consciousness and writing style with imagery as well. It's a very fun form to experiment with. Also, I'm so pleased you thought the quote fit in! I read it and thought it felt perfect for Narcissa, and the kind of comment she would make about herself.

Thank you (and I cannot say that enough!) for this really lovely and thoughtful and perfect review!!! You are awesome!! :D

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