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Review:academica says:
Hey there, here with your requested review :)

Okay, this is a bit of a challenge for me because I'm a Snape fan and I don't tend to appreciate authors or stories that demonize him. BUT--I liked this. It was really nice to read this darker take on Neville, especially because I always wondered if he ever overcame or moved past his fear or hatred toward Snape. Anyway, all this is to say that I'm glad you requested this story because I liked it and I appreciate being challenged as a writer and reviewer.

You're right, Neville is definitely "different" in this story! On the one hand, I'm glad to see him truly recognizing his own strength and taking a stand, even though it seems to come at the price of feeling betrayed by his own friends. This Neville is clearly a reaction to the ridicule and doubt he suffered as a young boy, and I'm saddened to see that he went to the extreme of hatred and stubbornness in this story. While a lot of that is very believable considering all that he went through (for example, I loved the contrast where he was enraged one minute and crying the next), I can't help but feel like some of it is a little extreme--for example, the drinking. Maybe a little to calm him down, but this sort of belligerent excess reminds me more of a Death Eater than the hero of the Battle of Hogwarts. Perhaps that comparison is meant to be evoked, though. I get the sense that there is meaning under the surface that I haven't gotten here yet. I've really grown to admire Neville in recent years and I'm always happy when he's the subject of a story, because it doesn't happen often.

I liked the imagery here a lot, like the way you described Neville standing up and knocking over boxes and the way he recalled his final year at Hogwarts with Snape as Headmaster. I also liked having the storm in the backdrop as a metaphor for Neville's tumultuous and angry feelings. I also think you did a nice job with flow; I felt like it was easy to follow Neville's train of thought, and you gracefully interspersed his feelings with his actions in the present moment.

Very nice work! Like I said, this wouldn't normally be my cup of tea, but thank you for requesting it. I hope my review is helpful to you!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello!

I too am not a fan of Snape-demonising and believe he is a very complex character. However writing from Neville's perspective definitely challenged this view for me because of what he went through with Snape and the personal history there which made this piece so fun to write!

Thank you! I felt that Neville grew in many ways as a character, particularly in the final book and so would not be as much of a pushover in later life. The drinking was more of a 'one night' kind of thing, and more of just Neville in a bad mood rather than being a true reflection of his character. The fact that it challenged your perception of him is a victory I suppose!

Thank you! The storm was definitely a big part in setting the scene here. I'm glad you thought the description and flow was good too.

Thanks for taking the time to do this request Amanda! :)


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