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Review:patronus_charm says:
Back again!

First point – I really loved the timeframe! I thought it would be really jolty and annoying but it really grew on me, as I’m one of those people who constantly need to know the time so having it done here was really great!

The aftermath of the kiss made me laugh so much with the stampede-like group of people chasing after them. She should really stop making appearances with Albus as it just seems to constantly trigger a riot. The timeframe really helped when Clemence was hiding the evidence of last night as it was just like a crime scene and she was running from the police or something, and it fits surprisingly well with what was actually happening.

Dom and Sean! No!!! I really wanted it to be her and Pickett and with the lack of potion it isn’t looking hopeful on that front, maybe there will be time for change and everything magically works out in the end :P Ah Appy though! It doesn’t look as if she’s going to let Clemence and Albus be like that. Apology my cauldron cake (silly 12+ word thing!), you’ve developed her character so well now that I can really relate to her with people in real life and they would never do that.

Ooh Caroline is something, huh? These girls really terrify me by the amount of interest they hold in these things and how they’re practically ready to wage war on her for dating Albus. And then the ending with the smoke and the banging of doors! I dread to think what will happen next.

I wonder whether what Albus and Clemence got up to again will become a regular occurrence. I’m still so confused about Clemence’s feeling with the way she dismissed him. Gah, it must be my tiredness as I can’t even be bothered to analyse it right not! An great chapter though!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Oh goodie, it works for you! After finishing these chapters I was a bit eh about the time frame :P but I wanted to see if it could work for narrating the events over a day. I had a lot more ~time~ descriptions to tie it all together. Basically--I had a lot of people and little events to re-introduce and I needed a clever way to do it xD

The funny thing is, Dom has technically been in pursuit of Sean this entire fic (as a fling) even though there are Pickett feelings floating about. She is that oblivious. But I also wanted to write her as someone with a more promiscuous social life by choice, is responsible about it, and is not looked down upon for it, at least by her friends.

These wars are a representation of shipping wars :'D so you can see where I get my frenzy from. You don't even have to look far to find it in real life. Caroline, though, I'd say she's just in it to watch Clemence get ruined. That's the other appeal of these things; watching the worst of people come out and watching them fail. It's like the monster truck show of secondary school.

♥ thank you again, Kiana! ^__^


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