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Review:AlexFan says:
Oooh, never read something like this before. I'm actually looking forward to seeing what Snape wrote in his diary or journal or whatever he wanted to call it.

I like the way that it;s written though, it looks a lot like something that J. K. Rowling would write and it sounds a tiny bit like her but you can still your voice, the author's, in the writing and you can tell that it's different.

There's not much that I would change about this except capitlize the first letter of Harry and reword this sentence He uneasily eyed the locked drawer that was in front of him. because it's worded a little bit awkwardly.

The message that Lily left Snape though was so childish and young sounding and I could just picture her writing the message and giving it to her best friend with an excited look on her face. I could picture Snape in my head with this huge smile on his face, happy to get a present from one of the most important people in his life.

I like the idea of this though, learning about Snape's life through his diary. I really think that this is going to be really interesting!

Author's Response: Yay again for originality! I love it when someone tells me that it's something they've never read before :)

WOAH. :O Like something JKR would right!? You should see my face right now. It's split into the biggest grin you can imagine. However, I'm glad that it does have my own voice and style in it too. If there's anything you want, it's to have your own niche in this big world of writers.

Oh god! I've forgotten to edit these things! The thing with challenge entries is that sometimes, I don't have too much time and I don't get enough time to go through it three-four times, as I would like to!

I'm glad you could picture it well. Characterization and visual imagery are so important to a writer. Thank you :)

Thank you so much for this lovely review :D


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