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Review:MC_HK says:

This was an entertaining chapter! Lily was really sassy, and we still got to see a little insight from Dorcas even though it wasn't her POV. I also wonder why you made the waiter's name Harry, so I'm looking forward to reading more and finding out. I also like seeing things from a different POV than Dorcas or Sirius.

Other than a few punctuation, grammar, and spelling errors, I found a few more issues:

I feel like you should have wrote in the beginning that this was from Remus's POV, because I was really confused up until he arrived at the Potter residence.

"...I don't think he made to do it, but they always made me feel guilty. In fact, I know they didn't mean to do it. It's just, I really did owe them so much." So I think this needs to be reworded because it doesn't really make sense. The first "made" should be "mean", but then you go from just James to all of the Marauders making Remus feel guilty. I think this should be reworded to make it more clear.

Other than that, I like this chapter! Looking forward to reading more,


Author's Response: Thanks so much!

I like having a different POV as well. I think Remus is an important character I don't have enough of in this.

Sorry! I thought I did put that in. I must have missed it. Thanks for that wording as well. I thought that was important to have in there so I definitely want to clear it up.

Thanks so much for your review. The new chapter will come along soon.

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