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Review:toomanycurls says:
Hi!!!
I have to say, I've never read a fic about Walburga. It's a really cool idea to write about this era and these characters.

I like the idea of WWII and the wizards - it would be cool to explore that more. What kind of impact did it have on the wizarding world? Suddenly I'm dying to know.

While it's pretty neat to read about these characters who were just names on a family tree. What might help is to have more dialogue between the characters. Description without interaction is a bit dense to get through. There's not a ton of action to the narrative. That might help create more of hook for the reader to dive into the story.

It's a pretty dark narrative but there's not a lot of context about why Walburga is so miserable. It would be nice to have a bit more insight for her dour mood.

One small formatting note is to try having just one space between each line. One person told me that it's part of the validation requirements (but if it's not try keeping them just a line space apart).

Author's Response: Hi!

Thanks for the well written review. I'll go more in depth with WWII as the fic goes on! Though, I'll have to read up on France, Britain, and a couple other countries and their roles in the war. I'm from America, and young, so I haven't taken world history in school, nor have I ever taken the time to read up on their parts. But I will!

I will add more dialogue. This was just an introduction to the fic. It'll have more context and such as it moves on!

The spacings always gives me issues. It is part of the validation requirements that it adds extra returns in the story, and it drives me nuts.

Thanks!

-Janelle


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