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Review:navyfail says:
Hey Kiana! I'm here from the Ravenclaw Review battle. This also gives me time to catch up on this amazing story you've got here.

First off, a nice way to open the scene. Your descriptions really bring out your ability to take advantage of imagery.

Another thing I like is seeing Lorcan. I can get more of a feel of his personality from Scorpius's point of view. I found it nice that you mentioned of what happened before Scorpius settled in Egypt for a while. It adds a new layer to the relationship between Scorpius and Rose. :)

The transition between points of view is very smooth. It doesn't seem unnatural but seems fresh and interesting. And the continuance of the surroundings and climate they are in is great!

... Woah, the ending to this chapter is quite fast compared to the rest of the pace but it does keep me wondering. What has happened to them? And who is the owner of that voice?

Great chapter.
~Sama

Author's Response: Hi Sama! Haha, I do that a lot too, because real life does take away a lot of my reviewing time.

Thanks for the great compliments on the description in this chapter, I worked hard at it as I wanted it to match the pace and scene so I'm glad that it paid off.

I really liked Lorcan too, so it's great that you did! He will be appearing a lot more from now on so don't worry! As for Rose and Scorpius, I continue to explore their past and present relationship in this so watch out for more layers of information!

Haha, as for the answers to the questions they will be revealed in the chapter I'll be posting up tomorrow so don't worry about that!

Thanks for a great review, Sama! ♥

-Kiana


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