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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Amanda! I meant to get to this a lot sooner but school is eating away at my HPFF time so it ended up taking me an age :P

Your characterisation of Lily was excellent if I saw so myself! I really loved how you took the risk to portray the darker and more twisted side of Lily, because if you look at her background at this time you would expect it to be like that. I really loved how the age played a big factor in her feeling like that, because I think a lot of people overlook that so to have her reminiscing about her wanting to be a child was a really wonderful. The complexity of the feeling coupled with the fact she was now forced out of that by having her own child was just great. :D

One thing that was really poignant for me was the theme of her needing to go back to her roots. She wanted the security of being a child but as she couldnít have that due to being pregnant she sought that in finding out whether she was or not through Muggle means. She just felt so lost and bewildered, and I thought you captured her feelings perfectly in this turbulent stage of her life. Also, another thing about that scene which I really liked was the description relating to the test. It was sort of sparse but really effective and created a great atmosphere for it.

The thoughts about Snape made me just want to cry. I never thought about his thoughts from a perspective of him being her friend but this made me think from that, and it added a new light on both of their characters. Again, it tied in really well with the whole going back to her roots theme and I thought the thought you put into conveying that was really great.

The lack of mentions towards James was really interesting. Iíve never seen a Lily so detached from him in a way, but I really liked it. Yes, they were in love but were they necessarily meant to be? That question which seemed to resonate throughout this story was really great, and questioned fan fiction as whole in away about how we almost put them on a pedestal without looking at the depth of them, but you didnít it and created that depth which is why this is so great! ♥

I didnít think you strayed far from the canon path mainly because we donít know much about Lily so how sheís portrayed is usually dictated to us with what others do in fan fiction. Gah, I just love this! ♥


Author's Response: Hey Kiana! I can always depend on you to leave me a kind, thought-provoking review :)

Oh, I'm so glad you like my Lily! You're right--in the same way that people tend to forget that there was a war going on in Marauder times, they don't tend to talk about Lily and James's youth when they got married and had a child. On top of that, I can definitely relate to the feeling of wanting to be a carefree child again and missing having my mother there to solve all of my problems now that I'm an adult.

I liked the idea of Lily sneaking off to a Muggle doctor in order to be sure that she was pregnant before she went home to James. I thought of it as providing her a moment of solitude and some comfort in the midst of her apprehension about the test results. I tried not to describe the testing in too much detail because we know how it works and I thought it would be kind of gross, but I'm glad that the imagery I did include worked well for you.

I'm pleased that you liked how I discussed Severus and James here. It's still hard for me to be fair to James because I really don't get why people are so enamored with him, but I tried to emphasize that Lily still loves him despite wanting to be her own woman and have fewer responsibilities. I am glad that you felt like I exposed some of what gets glossed over in most fanfiction.

Thank you so much for your awesome review :)


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