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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello! I'm finally here to resume our long-term review swap. I hope you still have time for this, if not, I definitely understand. I'm sorry for my several-months-long absence- real life became crazy and I don't know quite where the time went.

This was another really well done chapter. One of the things I find really great about this story is your ability to switch tones between Lily's sections and Regulus'- because of course Regulus hangs around "darker" people.

I really liked how you set up this chapter. The description in the beginning of this chapter worked really well to set the stage as well as introduce the characters. Rosier's dialogue immediately reminded us about who we are watching/reading about.

Rosier's superior attitude was very well written. I particularly liked how you only showed it through his actions and his words, in how he stated that the bartender wouldn't be any trouble and how everyone looked to him to ask about and understand the ways of the Death Eaters.

Also, I liked how Rosier told Regulus that he only bought drinks for girls. It fit in perfectly with his characterization, especially since he was the one who made Regulus buy that drink in the first place, instead of his preferred drink.

The switch into Lily's section was very well done as well. It was immediately apparent that we were with a different class of people. The interaction between Severus and Lily was also well written. I particularly liked Lily's line about how she's no one's Lily, because, of course, she isn't. No one should treat her as a prize, or put her on a pedestal.

I also liked how there was no definite resolution. There were steps towards a potential healing, a potential mend of the break, yes, but there was nothing resolved in their interaction. This is great because their situation is now far more complicated than it was before, and Severus needs to apologize deeply and very well in order for them to move past the insult he called Lily. If Severus had accomplished that in this one interaction, it might have seemed too easy, and thus not fit in with the complexities of this story.

I am very curious about the ending of the chapter. It's probably due to the length of time since I last read this story, but the description of Sirius' eyes was quite interesting. I can't remember if something occurred to cause Sirius to look that way... Gah- there probably was. A reminder, please? Anyway, the description, and Regulus' subsequent observation, was a great way to further link the two character groups as well as show Regulus' concern for his brother.

All in all, I think that you did a fantastic job with this chapter and I do hope that we can continue with our exchange. Great work! :D

Author's Response: Hi Claire! I'm glad to hear from you, since I haven't seen you around for quite a while. I'll admit that I'm really very busy this semester, and while I'll try to maintain the swap, reviews will probably be a little more spread out than they were over the summer. If you'd prefer not to continue, though, that's fine with me. Just let me know.

It's great that you liked the beginning of this chapter and the emphasis on Rosier as a leader. It's interesting for me to think about the Death Eater hierarchy, since it seems very "dog eat dog" compared to the way the Order is structured. Rosier is king among these younger students, but surely he would cower before someone like Dolohov, and they would both be meek before Voldemort.

Naturally Lily would hope for a simple solution, but as you said there's a lot of carnage between her and Severus and a quick fix wouldn't be realistic (or very interesting, I think). Both of them are unwilling to commit fully to the reconciliation in their own separate ways.

Well, Sirius's expression was just a reminder that he doesn't want to reconcile with Regulus or trust him the way Regulus wishes he would. There's a definite separation between them, one that the others present there don't really understand.

Thanks so much for another awesome review!

-Amanda


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