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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello! I'm here with your requested review.

This is such an interesting story, and I'm really glad you decided to write it. It always struck me as so strange that Lily and James were only 21 when they died, and had a baby when they were 19! That seems so young! And yeah, they were in love, etc. but I really love how you've captured Lily's worries and unease about it. It's something that will change her life forever, and she's still wondering if she's lived enough for herself yet before she has a baby and has to put him first instead. It's easy to not realise just how tough of a situation that must have been for her, so I'm glad you really went into that.

You've written Lily darker than she usually is portrayed, but still is very Lily. In all her memories of childhood, and of her sister, and all the happiness and carefree-ness... but it's viewed as kind of a bitter reflection from someone who had to grow up too fast. I'm starting to ramble - but I really like your Lily. The darker aspect really makes her a deeper, more complicated, and ultimately more relatable character.

And about James treating her as a possession - that was an interesting paragraph. It's clear that they loved each other but it made me wonder, if Voldemort hadn't killed them, would Lily and James have stayed together for years? (personally I like to think they would have, but you've hinted that maybe Hogwarts sweethearts don't live happily ever after - so kudos on the realism there.)

It doesn't deviate too far from canon, and the story definitely makes sense. I think you did a wonderful job with it! I always enjoy your writing so much, and this was no exception.

Author's Response: Hey there, thanks for coming by!

I'm really happy that you liked my take on Lily. I didn't want to pretend like she and James didn't love one another, but I wanted to emphasize her youth and the possibility of her fear because I think it gets downplayed a lot for the sake of romance. I see some similarities in the possessive way Severus and James felt toward Lily, and there was something about James that made her feel like he could be forgiven for that. I'd love to figure out what it was someday.

It's great that Lily feels more relatable to you. I can definitely empathize with her feelings about wanting to be a child again and missing her family, because I often dwell on that as a busy, stressed adult.

I'm definitely not saying that James and Lily wouldn't have stayed together. I guess what I tried to emphasize is that they, like any other couple, might have had some arguments and might have doubted things--James as well as Lily, though I went with her in this piece. I think that can be said of any struggling young adult. To me, if you can love each other and persevere through those challenging times, that makes for a much more intriguing love story.

Thank you for your wonderful review :)


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